This is really good, however the spelling could do with some improvement . I loved the way you portrayed Snape and how he dealt with a crying Teddy. I laughed so hard I almost fell off my chair.

Just finished the first chapter, and content-wise, it's great! However, it's pretty difficult to read with the grammar errors as they are. Maybe look into a beta?

Great!
A bit of re-reading to tighten up the grammar and I'll be perfect.
I can image them 11 years later taking Teddy to King Cross Station and Severus still saying he is with them temporarily whilst being called Dad by Teddy :-D

OK. I like it so far. If you could have someone read over and make minor corrections to verb tenses if would be great

well I'm super sad that you had to mangle it but it was still awesome

That ending was so sweet and tender.