some constructive criticism: I suggest you make less cuts to different scenes. it gets a bit distracting. In fact, I would personally cut out the POVs from teams CRDL and RETH. I really liked the last 6 chapters, though. Teams RRNN and JWBY are pretty-well written; it's a good follow up to NTTF, and I was definitely looking forward to the big reveal to his team. I really liked how Yang went and hugged Ruby. I'm still wishing for a big group hug thanking Jaune, after all the shit he went through to save them

I feel like one of the reasons that Coeur didn't take the story any farther is that the reveal that Jaune was a time traveler is almost impossible to make believable to a lot of the characters. Even with Weiss, where there was a clear way for him to prove it, that part of the story was relatively short and not focused on heavily. Though I haven't read a lot of other time travel stories I feel like I can say with confidence that the way you handled Jaune telling everyone the truth was near perfection, and I can't wait to see how the story continues.

i really liked this... there's so much I wanted (and still want to see) from this AU; the original ended a bit too abruptly for my taste. I always wanted to see Weiss' caring relationship with Jaune considering he's been through so much and she knows it. Also their inside jokes considering the other teammates don't know about the time travel

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