I always like these stories with the feel good happy endings, something about narutos life and easy forgiveness of the village that scorned him never sat right with me in the manga, so a nice revenge story where naruto makes konoha his bitch always gets my wheels turning. Pretty good plot in the fic by the way. Got some grammar issues but nothing that wont be ironed over time should you continue writing. Side note I liked the way you handled NaruHina in the story, a lot of people try to make her some kind of tsundere crazy clingy fangirl but i never got that vibe from her.

So this isn't bad even if the plot is a little cliché but, it desperately needs it's grammar fixed

'No, I am perfectly sane and I freed him because we made a deal. He trains me and then when I am strong enough I will free him."...yeah I'm just gonna back away dumpster fire of writing.

you have a good story but a few spelling mistakes here and there but like I said it is a good story

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Ok so good story. Little short but not TOO short. Usually when I see bad grammar like this though it’s consistently bad. Yours seems to get better then worse and fluctuates. I usually attribute that to English not being your first language but given what I said it could be you were tired or rushing those chapters. Could I ask which please?

Nice

Best ending ending of all.

God damn leane to fucking space the paragraphs no one wants to read a long ass paragraph.

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This story is awesome.

Semi decent story but I absolutely abhor your grammar and spelling damn near every other word is wrong or used In the wrong way use a goddamn spell checker your story could have been senile ok but the way you wrote it makes it mediocre at best

Loved it, amaz!

This story is amazing Author-Chan/Kun! I absolutely love how Naruto took no shiz from them C:

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