when will be updated

hm it seems interesting but why is Zeltrech stretch? Not to mention heaven's feel Shirou gives up his dream of being a hero so he won't be a counter guardian and it's implied the UBW one also doesn't end up becoming completely obsessed with his dream.

This is a great chapter.

There's a few mistakes every now and then but the story seems nice also none of the Shirous become counter guardians aside from EMIYA especially heavens feels Shirou except the hero ending anyway if you need help writing you can pm me if you want

you gave shiro the jeweled sword of zelretch... dxdverse is fked
ok...fateverse gods from the age of gods are...i do whatever i want because i have the authority to, dxd god is just dude with lots of power. shiro just got the jeweled sword of zelretch...welp hood luck

Mmmm Zelretch le dará como regalo su espada enjoyada de seguro

set up seems ok but nothing has really happened yet to establish how the story will progress. you clearly used a spellchecker and it has swapped out nameszeltrech to stretch was the most common one. there were a few other errors that looked spellcheck generated as well, where a word was used that did not fit but was close in spelling to something more appropriate. it was always possible to tell what you intended to be there, so your overall writing is decent.

Story has potential, though, with the misspellings of characters names and not doing good writing standards, you will have trouble getting a following. If you aren't doing this already, I suggest using libre-office for writing the story.

I love it please keep up the good work.

I recommend that you take your story though the grammarly site, it indicates what are your mistakes.

Keep writing

vey very good. you histori

if someone could help me i will appreciate it

how do I get a beta reader

Advice: Get a beta reader so they can proofread your work.

You've got some interesting ideas here, but you'll need to polish it a fair bit more.