Thank you for sharing these!

These are awesome! I always thought they missed a lot of potential with her and it's nice to see someone giving her some attention! If you ever wrote a spinoff with these bits, possibly tying in with sod, I would be alllll over that!

Oh fantastic! This was such a treat! :) I really miss reading your writing. I'd absolutely love if you made this into a full fic. I'll also be looking forward to more deleted scenes! Happy holidays!

Amazing and incredible as always!
I love reading these short snippets.
It's so interesting to read these "could-have-been" chapters.

I agree that Nikki needed to be a bit abrasive and I found her character a refreshing. I'm glad you made the changes, as she seems to come out just mean rather than teasing. Perhaps someone who is very close such as a brother can get away with saying hurtful things as an expression on affection, but without a relationship of trust and love its just hurtful. Some of those comments might be particularly cutting. Danny, who has had enough bullying in his life could easily have taken this not a teasing but as someone else who was trying to put down someone who was in a weaker position. I'm glad you cut it out or you would have had to spend a lot of time repairing the relationship.

You gave us just enough background information on Nikki so the reader could put together the pieces to know that she is strong, brave and compassionate and can serve as an example to Danny that it doesn't take superpowers to be a hero. The idea of saving her from a fire and an evil boyfriend is very exciting and might provide some extra motivation for confronting the gang and taking a bullet for Danny but it does distract and take away from the idea of her being an 'ordinary' hero.

Okay, not going to lie - Danny saving Gabe from getting hit by a truck was awesome even if trucks and cars tend not to burst spectacularly into flames in Hollywood or cartoons. It does, as you point out, require lots of snow and ice which doens't fit the timing. Having Danny save Gabe from a gang of hooligans works much better plot wise. It introduces us to the punks establishes the nastiness of the gang and gives them motivation for taking revenge on Danny later. I also think it works better the way Danny takes scares them off using his daring and brains. This makes the story line more cohesive.

I can't remember how the timing fit it but

Still it was cool and fun to picture so I'm glad to read it.

In moving Danny away from Amity Park, he also moves away from his usual ghostly adversaries and comes to more usually confront the real world with the cruelty of humans.

I agree that having Shannon be the one to get hit really wouldn't have worked well for the personality reasons and that you were trying to wrap up the story not send Danny irreversibly over the edge. The exert shows this clearly. It was already established that Shannon is a tenderhearted self-sacrificing angel but seeing these traits in gritty Nikki has a lot of impact.

I agree with you decision to stream line the story so that it didn't focus on minor characters but at times it niggled like a missing tooth how easily Danny's dissapearance was overlooked for so long especially once an investigation had been started. An investigation that included Vlad not to mention Sam, Tucker, Jazz and Jack Fenton. There were a lot of witnesses and this helps show how strong Dash's hold on them is. I appreciate you posting it here.

I miss you bonus scenes are such a treat, thank you! I'm looking forward to more, if there are more?
I forget, are you writing something else? Original stuff?

I am loving these deleted scenes so far! It's always so interesting to see the changes that happen in the process of writing a story. Can't wait for the next batch! TOODLES

gosh I love Nicki so much! Thank you for posting these wonderful scenes!

COOL! I LOVE IT!

i love reading these... its so interesting to see your thought process, and writing process

You write characters so dark and complex. I'm absolutely fascinated by it. This scene reminds me of an R.L. Stine book I read a long time ago called Girlfriend (not a Goosebumps one), and it creeped me out so much that I never forgot it, but the scene went that the boyfriend pushed the girlfriend off a cliff in the same manner as Dash, abusive but didn't mean to kill her, and then the boyfriend proceeded to not tell anyone she was dead and cover it up. The wickedness, the panic that you have to have to actually do that is nuts but this scene and that book described it so well, with the bits of craziness and paranoia that never go away, that I'm convinced (for like the 400th time) that you are an amazing writer. Than you for sharing this!

Amazing. Like everything else you've written!
I can't seem to find enough compliments to express just how incredible your writing is.
Love it, as always!

Oh yay! Bonus bits! Thanks

Gosh I love the whole universe you've created around these storys and all the characters, it's without doubt my favourite fic series. I adored the ending but I was sad when it happened and I can't believe after all this time we're going to get to see more little bits from soad, it's exciting!