Love it, can’t wait for more, please update soon, thanks x

they act as if it's Connors fault some android decided to shoot up the place. Connor tried to help you. he can't control someone else's actions and you're blaming him for that. did you forget without him you would have never gotten those androids from cyberlife? and to those androids from cyberlife did you forget that you were FREED BY HIM? he helped you way more than you even helped yourself. sure, he tried to kill you but that was his programming and he broke free from that. and he can't decide what another person does so if you dare blame him I will break the fourth wall and send you to the junkyard you ungrateful slugs

Ohhh, this is really nice! I've been trying to figure out the aftermaths of the game's endings for a while, and while my main ending is a bit different this is still a nice perspective. And I'm really interested to see where this is going. Thanks for the story and I hope you'll keep having motivation to continue!

What now?! Why is Markus not respnding!?

Seems interesting and well written I look forward to the next update!

This is intense stuff! Hope you'll continue it!

I love Markus being like "No Connor, I can tell you're about to do something stupid" and Connor "I'll do it anyway!" A bit odd he didn't do it before (probably so he had time to analyse), odd too Markus didn't move first P
I didn't get everything about what happened, and that android that showed up and almost killed Connor (who? Why? Why commit suicide in the end? So many other questions). I guess it's also because we'll know more later. I should really open an online dictionnary in another tab when I'm reading in English x)
I hope loosing thirium isn't too bad if you just give him some afterwards. Guess he should be okay. Better stop the, huh, bleeding anyway.
I'm really curious to read what will happen next

... I knew it. Really, why? Guess next chapter will tell me. But if it's gunshots, and after what happened (peaceful ending or civil war like one?), it shouldn't be an official reaction (or Hank didn't know about it). They wouldn't use guns against that much androids.

Nice beginning! That's cool that in most fanfictions I've seen so far, there's often references to the choices you made in the game so we know in which ending we are, more or less

I hope you haven’t given up writing this story and update soon. I love it. Can’t wait to see what happens next. :)

Nice. I love this- very accurate while creatively exploring the new territory after the game ended, as well as Connor's new deviancy. I like how you're showing that Hank and Connor are close, but not in a stereotypical, overly mushy way. They have a lot of real experience in some very dangerous situations after all, so they have tougher ways of looking out for each other in addition to affection. Looking forward to more!

I absolutely find this story intriguing, more so than most detroit fanfiction. It keeps the characters so similar to the game and also gives a vivid image of their actions. it also helps that this actually has an interesting plot. most authors skip the plot to just go for a fluffy slice of life setting with drama. that doesn't really suit this game or it's story so it's good to see someone writing something this good. amazing work!

Can’t wait to see what happens next. Tension got me gripping the edge of my seat! Amazing. Well done. 3

So far, this is the most intricate chapter you've written. There was a lot going on in such a short time and you managed to make it coherent and just flat out good. In the first third of the chapter, there was a spot where a word was missing "...and remembers Hank's earlier , this time, he was right." It isn't anything major (I mean, I always have a million such mistakes in my stuff so the fact you only had one is impressive!), but I figured I'd point it out so you have the option to go back and change it if you want to :)

Finally, I appreciate your characterization of Connor. It isn't so "fluffy," so to speak, and I am liking the more serious tone to this story so far. Also, the plot is thickening... so please continue to write more! :)

Wow! What a cliffhanger! I can't wait to see what'll happen next! That was so well written too!