Hope this dosnt tien into another harmen fan fic i mean even tge daiymio didnt have one in naruto. Don't make him too op

Abandoned?

can't wait for the next chapter.

I love born killer it's a great perk not to op but still op I've been trying to start righting fanfictions but I'm a perfectionist and have been having some trouble but when I get my ideas and finish righting and gaining courage to post/righting I'll probably be using that perk hopefully at least.

Alright I'm out. It was decent enough, but you kept dumping all of his stats way too often, makes it a chore to read. Pacing is way too fast, overall flow feels wonky and everyone feels a bit out of character. On top of that you wrote 'u' instead of 'you'. No. Just no. You're writing a story, not texting a mate.

Not really sure why all of your dialogue is in italics.

Gah, names are proper nouns. Ergo, they all require a capital letter. Uchiha, Naruko, Lee, Guy etc. S.

Write and right are 2 different things, you need a beta.

Lmaoooo, it's hoarse mate, Horace is that bloke from Harry Potter.

I'd take the Fugaku's brother timeline. You might not know the dangers but at least you can get good training and the clan will protect you if/when the gamer ability starts being noticed.

Perks were a bit boring. Why is there a perk for everything but ninjutsu? Plus you'd think that having damaged coils would have some negative effect. I'd also think that Sharingan or Uchiha would increase INT per level since they're supposed to have gotten the strong chakra of the So6P while the Senju got the strong bodies. So in my mind at least Uchiha have strong spiritual energy while Senju have strong physical energy.

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when are you gonna update