It's been awhile since I've read this story and I come back to some wholesome Ditto and Doduo time!

I like where this story is going. I hope you keep up the good work! Out of curiosity though, is this story based on an already completed run, or are you still playing whilst writing this story?

I actually had to reread the entire story to remind myself what's happened so far. The original is still more fresh in my mind for some reason.

I'm glad the 'original' Kindle is starting to show herself.

Going back a bit, I've always been confused in these stories when the reason Ash tries to explain why he doesn't think about Aura because it's dangerous and reminds him of Lucario.

I just recently finished reading through this whole story so far. I have to say, I thoroughly enjoyed it. The plot is a really unique and awesome concept to explain a 'Nuzlocke' run and and a dark world where pokemon die. It's so fitting!

I also appreciate how you've done Ash. He feels out of character, but in a good way. It's not hard at all to imagine that he would cringe at the sight of blood and injuries on a pokemon, coming from a world where pokemon never really get hurt. He's awkward, uncertain and meek. It's a good place to start for him and is appropriately heart wrenching.

I am quite curious to see where his character goes from here. Will he have to toughen up? Will he find a way to battle and try to avoid the killing blow? Will he become desensitized eventually? The possibilities are fascinating!

The plot and characters are otherwise sound as far as I can tell. I like the inclusions of Shauna Trevor and Tierno. The way everyone acts in Yveltals world is suitably creepy too. The lack of care for pokemon...saddening.

Anyways, no big complaints from me yet! I personally think you've crafted a very intriguing concept!

For some reason, I feel like Kindle telling Amber about her mission from Lysandre is a bit of a deathflag. I wouldn't be surprised if after getting all of that off her chest, that this conversation ends up being one of the last times they ever get to speak with one another like this. Kindle has mostly been pretty closed off from making friends, and Amber is probably the only pokemon friend she's ever really had besides Ash, but he's human though, so their relationship is different. Besides that, there have been a lot of hints lately that Amber isn't long for this world since she has trouble using protect.

Good to have a new chapter so welcome back.

It is interesting about Avery's relations and backround and it seems Kindle is starting to break down from her assumptions about Ash with his unwilling connection to Yveltal

Glad to see this story updated.

It's good to see Avery reunite with his mother. Mother and son together again, but I though he would've been released. Regardless, Ash has Avery officially in his team and the bird pokemon has a resolve to end the breeding system his mother escaped from. I do find it funny imagining a Dodou hanging upside like a Zubat.

Kindle has quite grown and connected with Ash, Amber, and the rest of the team. It's good to see her admitting her care for them and wanting to protect them. While it may cause pain for her and may have given doubt on her mission on the long run, they will help her when she needs it.

Another chapter! I hope the frequency improves. Hope everything is OK

Nice to see an update after so long! This was a really interesting chapter and I enjoyed it. It was interesting to see how the concept of breeding Pokemom is like here and Avery becoming a permanent member was nice! Hope to see more.

Yes finally! It's so good to see this story update and not to to waste! Thanks for updating!

And I loved this chapter! It was so emotional with Avery, who has become a permanent member of the team. Yay! Also poor Kindle! She is so confused by Ash, isn't she? XD (lucky she has her friend Amber there, even if she doesn't know what Kindle is talking about)

Once again, thanks for updating and hope to read more soon:)

Maaan, it's been forever since I read this. Had to reread some parts just to remember what happened prior. But I'm definitely glad to see that you are still continuing this story.

Oh gosh o.o I can sense tragedy about to strike, and I don't want it! x.x The reunion scene with Avery was so sweet! I wonder when Nami's training will start...

not to be rude, but the Ash in your story is kinda ... meek or perhaps lacking,( I think is the word that I'm looking for) Great plotline, with next to no plothole, didn't seem overdone or anything... (like ash geting stronger pokemon or being best or all that). However what I want to tell you is that despite your great storyline I or anyone find it hard to believe that this is the boy who had commanded a ferocious Charizard (all complexities at first aside), completed Frontier Brains, secured reputed rank in 5 championships and could be considered Orange Island Champion not to mention faced so many legendaries...
It is hard for him to face pokemon death, no pika pal of his here, but his hesitance and stuttering when it comes to land killing blow on pokemon I accept and is natural however the stuttering gets old and boring in a kind of way... you lack the fiery charm that is Ash's own... he has worth of experience under his belt while not as enthusiased as about battles as he might be in his own world doesn't mean he won't do anything to keep his friends-his pokemon safe, you need to have him confident in battle delaying the killing blow is fine but there should be no stuttering or hesitancy while defending his own and you should have him so hesitating about everything like. how he stutters when he talks to people it isn't right, while i don't think you should make him overly enthusiased kid you should also not make him meek, impressionless kid too who doubts everything... I have a sudden idea while reading this that I would like to share... Arceus is the guardian in your story he have to a little more powers than others to. oversee a bunch of ancient powerhouses to keep them from going overboard perhaps he communicates Ash in his sleep without Yveltal knowing and telling him what is at stake if he couldn't finish his quest... it will give him determination to go forward and with his personality to protect his pokemon he would do everything in his power to protect and since the only way he could do that is by making his team strong and all that... By the way whatever you do your story have me hooked up here and I won't be leaving it so soon... do your best fella

Oh well Ash is ded stories over

Discontinued?