Great

Great

Your characters are beyond ooc, and it really ruins this story. A few minor changes are ok so long as they're reasonable but here you have Starfire being a complete bitch when in the show she is the sweetest and Raven is way too emotional, to the point of being bipolar, when she should be repressing her emotions due to Trigun still being a threat. Not to mention Ben being so flirty, Ben can be arrogant but he isn't a flirt.

Well this whole chapter was straight out of left field. Would a little but of development be that hard?

Holy crap Blackfire is here and Slade is here too who force Blackfire who join him or die and what going to happened and please continues this story please!?

Hm... so Blackfire is a pedo...?

Okay kinda hard to follow this chapter. Was it Blackfire that had sex with Ben or was it Starfire. And was it kid Ben or teen Ben that had sex. Really confusing.

Keep up the good work

Awesome update. Looking forward to reading more.

good chapter loved the appearance of a lot of the ben ten villains, and drama added with slades second spy, also loving how cyborg is figuring out what's in his head very slowly but surely. maybe overload will make an appearance and he caused a strong enough electrical shock to short out the chip in his head , or maybe Ben will try nanomech to fix him when the chip buried itself too deep and causes actual damage to his brain. I was really hoping for tetrax to make an appearance and I had one issue with young Ben using astrodactyl because he didn't get that alien till omniverse and as far as we've seen old Ben only unlocked one new alien for him, I feel it should of been either heatblast or stinkfly seeing as they were his flying aliens, he could of also turned into cannonbolt because of his speed and durability. other wise down with Billy soon hopefully or maybe some romance, keep up the good work and update soon.

love this chapter especially when max died and young Ben called old Ben, even though it was kinda sad to see max die they basically kind of killed him the whole first season of alien force. was a little disappointed that Raven talked him into doing the deal sort of and that it was such a short chapter. kinda hoping to see old Ben train young Ben for a while till his parents are back from vacation and maybe a little Raven and Gwen training in basic magic till she falls into her anodite side. and I figured once Raven was trying to convince Ben to give it a shot that he'd go ask young Ben all incognito because if anyone would know about this dimensions Billy, if it's not the original Billy that was lost in another dimension, would be this dimensions Ben seeing as they first met over that first summer, now I'm hoping maybe miss martian knows about Billy since it seems like she's starting to put the pieces together since the telepathy incident and now that she's read young Ben's mind and knows about that like Raven did maybe she saw the whole summer including Billy. hope cyborg gets freed from the control soon too, but enough rambling keep up the good work and update soon.

Damn

Wow that’s emotional. Looking forward to reading more.

some relationship chapters would be nice too especially after they were in Ben's mind and wisdom basically told them to be a harem for Ben so his heart could like live. and there are sweet moments between miss martian and beast boy I wouldn't mind seeing either. you know some fluff, limes, or lemons could also help draw in more readers like the hardcore romantics that want all three, your more pervy reader more interested in the fact the story has foreplay stuff(limes)and smut like lemons, and if you outline the start and end of the more adult stuff like limes and such you'll draw in and probably keep the light romantics more interested in the fluff part of the relationships. you've already got a great handle on action writing from what I've seen of the story so far and you lightly touch the romance, almost like maybe nervous about it and that's understandable I see a lot of authors limit themselves in those areas out of doubts or what not about losing their readers or the story gets kicked and etc. and this may not be you I don't know but I'm just saying i, personally, wou this was kinda an afterthought review didn't realize it would be so long

another short but great chapter and I like that you are also kind of thing it to the original Ben ten as well as the omniverse and alien force. what with the ending sounding like the episode where Ben first meets tetrax as a kid in Bellwood. really hope you either keep cyborg with the Android turning/upgrading her into a full ai so she can execute free will and such ethics and morals, or keep him with bee because their relationship actually had quite the development over the Titans series with brother blood and the whole hive academy. I'd really love to see more of Ben next chapter, maybe a little longer chapter, where he just kinda goes balls to the wall but one punch man style almost where he's pretty op, I mean Omnitrix/ultimatrix and alien x in his bank, but plays it smart so as to almost give his enemies a sort of overconfidence which leads to their downfall. I mean that's kinda how the whole first Slade arcs went down with Robin and terra. I love kaiber as a villain because of his pet dog that had the negatrix, which I always found to be a fun concept to play with like what if they took it and tried repurposing it for good, but another good villain arc would be the Trigon arc but maybe don't involve Slade change to a Ben ten alien to be trigons herald like in alien force with vilgax when Ben goes public. enough of my rambling I'm just excited when I read a fix like this with such a nice style, and such great potential, not to mention hasn't been abandoned or put on hiatus so keep up the great work and update soon. if you ever hit writer's block and don't know what to do next story wise PM me I'm not the greatest at putting my thoughts on the page as a writer but I've got a bunch of thoughts/ideas to help get you unstuck, I try to help writer's as I can like my profile name suggests through helpful reviews.