I love how you are keeping things in character so far! You have a strong writing style, but it's easy to follow. It's a good break from studying!

im a tiny bit frustrated with how quickly everything is happening in this story but i hate to leave things unfinished so im reading on. I still like it, i just wish you took a little more time on the characters and the plot. Not saying it has to be a slow burn by any means, but ive read other fics that move quickly, yet somehow manage to have a bit more detail and depth to them, if that makes sense. just some constructive insight.

how does saying "ill do better" forgive what he did?! im salty about it. *huffs*

what the fuck *deep frown*

why did you choose to add this chapter in right here? it seems so out of place and random. I know its meant to be a flash forward, but why not just make it an epilogue?

Yea cant do it. I tried to finish but between draco forcing himself on hermione, the unnecessary quidditch thing, it was tough. I continued a few chapters (up until the house elf thing) after but I realized that where most fanfiction (especially ones with any type of romance/drama/angst) usually elicit feeling from the reader. And for me this is very easy to experience. But I felt absolutely nothing reading this. It felt like drama fabricated to make people feel but no honest feeling in the words. Draco's confession and Hermione wanting to sleep with him came from no where with no build up or proof that they were even falling for each other. It's like it was just added in to justify the sleeping together and calling this a romance fic. Obviously you put effort into this but it didnt pay off for me as it made me feel nothing but disappointment I spent time reading it rather than reading something else. Sorry for the blunt review but I feel it's better to be honest.

I'm sorry but I have to say, I know you wrote the quidditch scene for drama but there is absolutely no way anyone would let heavily pregnant girls play such a rough sport for excercise at Hogwarts. It was so ooc it pulled me out if the story rather than making me feel worried/anxious for them which seems like should be the intended effect

You did such a good job. i was rather hoping someone secretly murdered Lucius, but i'll use my imagination to fill in those details. lol. thank you! xx

Pour Scorpious... I hope Draco is better father thank Lucius

Lol... i cant go on Reading... First marriage law fic are generally just the same but on yours they juste accept it and three min later they are married.
second, Draco rapes her and has no remorse and she just accept THIS ? it's a shame

It is lovely

FYI It’s Daphne Greengrass

Omg so
She didn’t fall in love with Draco.
And Ron is a douche

I am truly happy that this stupid,moronic and creepy story is finally over.

Wow very good but what happened to malfoy senior or did I miss that somewhere