Reviews for The Alola Pokedex
TheG0AT chapter 2 . 10/2
And now we have arrived at Starr. Let’s see what we’ve got here…

— As usual, I’m loving the implicit details you sprinkle in. When you touch on what situations choosing a Pokémon (in this case, Litten as a starter) are ideal, it makes the world of Broken Things feel lived in. I think if/when I eventually read it, this will help me starting out.
— [Incineroar have replaced their reproductive system with additional flame sacs] Interesting. So they can’t reproduce after evolution then? The thought is a funny one, I have to admit: it’s like they just give up on mating and say fuck it, time to pour all biological resources into combat. Lmao. It does make me wonder, though… what happens to a pregnant Torracat who evolves before giving birth? Or is evolution only ever tied directly to childbirth?
— I lol’d at the part where Torracat will specifically go for the eyebrows when trying to groom humans. The idea that they think they’re helping build up fuel reserves with hair is incredibly cute.
— [Sometimes they will even adopt babies that are orphaned because of the incineroar's own hunts.] Well geez. That’s harrowing.
— How odd. Cats are well known for their typical aversion to water/being wet, and the obvious fire hates water schtick is a thing as well. Yet members of the Litten line enjoy the rain? That’s a fun detail.
TheG0AT chapter 56 . 9/25
After realizing these can be read in virtually any order, I figured I’d take a gander at what different Pokémon you’ve covered. I’ll likely do a run-through of all the BLC characters that you happen to have made chapters for (i.e. Luxray, Incineroar…) very soon. But first, I simply could not resist stopping here.

— Huh. Never thought Jynx of all Pokémon would be low-maintenance. But I kind of get it, in a sense.
— I am dying at the lore behind Jynx growing skin here correlating with Jynx’s irl design changes. The fact that the nonfiction reason for the latter and the fictional reason for the former are the same is beautiful.
— How were Smoochum first sighted so late? Is it implied that they don’t inherently grow up into Jynx all the time? If I recall correctly, some eggs can canonically hatch Jynx straightaway and skip Smoochum entirely, so I can see how that would be reasoning for this.
— [In any case several jynx have millions of followers on Snap, Trozei, Play It!, Shuffle, and the Pokémon Channel.] Jynx Instagram thot culture is a fascinating mental image. I’m not entirely sure how I feel about it; it’s cursed, but it also fits. Jynx is a weird Pokémon. But that’s why I stopped here, so you could say I’m getting what I came for.
— [Their gains from reduced emotion sicknesses jynx and offset by new physical weaknesses.] I had trouble parsing this sentence. Is there a typo in here somewhere?
— Oh wow. So Jynx just… ignore each other after their mating sequence is finished. It’s almost like they’re endlessly reluctant to attach themselves to other Jynx, but do so anyway for the sole purpose of creating more.
— Having fun reading these!
TheG0AT chapter 1 . 9/25
— Interesting that Dartrix, a middle evolution, is the primary focus of the chapter as mentioned at the start, whereas Rowlet and Decidueye are only mentioned afterwards in parenthesis. Though, the title (on FFN, at least) is Decidueye. I’m guessing each chapter refers strictly to a whole evolution line?
— [Rowlet born in captivity seem to accept humans as large, featherless decidueye.] This is naturally a rather unique “fanfiction,” and thus doesn’t have a traditional beginning or setup. That said, you still made me laugh with this particular sentence in the very first paragraph. One way or another, not a bad hook.
— I like how, in so few words, you establish quite a lot about how types work. Just from a single paragraph, I can derive that typings aren’t typically considered black and white, that many Pokémon are even considered triple-typed (for example, might Latias be a flying type here?), and that there is a respectable organization that has established the traditional two-typing system. Just explaining it all here ends up taking longer to write out. You do a great job at being concise!
— [Some subspecies have also been documented killing even the predators that did not hunt dartrix so, in the future, those predator species will aggressively cull any others that get too aggressive with dartrix nests.] That’s badass.
— [Decidueye sleep less than two hours a day and spend the remainder of their time hyper-vigilant and seeking out battles.] On one hand, these things are ice cold and kinda scary. On the other, the idea of a ghost type sleeping is pretty funny.
— I like how you sometimes mention Rowlett’s status as a starter in a way that would give new trainers information on whether they should pick it or not. It makes it feel more like a book that could exist in an actual Pokémon world.
surskitty chapter 59 . 7/25
Eeee! I enjoy the whole thing of addressing how bonkers the fossilized pokemon are with the cute ghosts :3 It's a sensible bit of backstory and also means I'm picturing the early dragapult being Made of Rock and even more destructive at high speeds than the modem ones.

Dragapult faring well in anything sufficiently dense and viscous to resemble water is hilarious. I'm just imagining trying to test that. The brine pools are apparently fine, so are hot springs that are literally boiling, but they will not bask in olive oil. ... yet.

BOOM shoot the dreepy, dragapult, just launch those suckers into a flying whale. It deserves it.

Live feeding a dreepy sounds really dangerous for the dreepy ... At least dragapult presumably know what they're doing; I'm picturing a mandibuzz trying to YEET at some poor drifloon, but the mandibuzz can't help the baby go fast enough to keep the drifloon from willingly exploding.

The concept of "if dreepy, why not vikavolt" is extremely reasonable. As is banning dreepy. So is the capture method of "try not to die!"

They're good salamanders, Persephone.

Thank you! Sorry again for the delay 3
Xenomon chapter 59 . 7/20
You aren’t going address the part about how it looks like a stealth fighter?
An Author's Pen chapter 57 . 5/10
I enjoyed this one a lot! Nice to have properly badass gyarados. I really like the protector relationship between the magikarp and the gyarados. The mental image of gyarados razing factories to the ground to stop pollution is excellent.

Aerokinesis is an interesting way to justify the flying typing, which I've always found baffling. I like the idea of a gyarados lifted by rapid storm winds as its fury grows.

Tongue parasites! Scale abrasions! Brackish waters! Also like how difficult it is to keep a gyarados in captivity, since if anything displeases them, they'll just destroy your whole aquarium.
An Author's Pen chapter 58 . 5/10
Massive Nile whiscash! The pan-African conference sounds lit.

Dragonair feeding on whiscash, huh? I liked the detail about them taking advantage of the whiscash's slime for themselves.

Farming whiscash sounds like quite a lot of work. It must be something of a luxury meat, then?
surskitty chapter 58 . 5/10
NAMAZU

NAMAZU

NAMAZU lives in the Nile I guess
AngelFaux chapter 58 . 5/10
KNM here and I just wanted to post this here too

When I was a kid I really liked Whiscash but as I got older my interest in them waned. But the amount of thought you've put into them has rekindled my interest in them.
AngelFaux chapter 1 . 4/14
I'm mostly a lurker for this over at Spacebattles but I gotta say, I am really loving your twists and ideas for the different pokemon. The lore and worldbuilding is also pretty welldone.

Stay safe and I'm looking forward to more
OldSchoolJohto chapter 54 . 4/8
[venom can cause dizziness, nausea, short term memory loss, and impulsive behavior in humans.]

Omg it’s alcohol. You crafty hooligan.

Sororities and fraternities! Omg.

[force-feeding of cucumbers.]
Hahahahaha

Party duck.
OldSchoolJohto chapter 55 . 4/8
(For the numbers)

Good murderbaby.

[Flapple are not easily housebroken but can be gradually taught to use a litter box or pan.]
This is the first one that has sounded exactly up my alley. This I could manage.

[Enlightenment-loving revolutionary government was removed from power the Archbishop of the Church of Life ordered the gathering of every apple, flapple, and appletun in the region to Lumiose. They were all held in one central pen and lit on fire in front of thousands of onlookers.]
Eep. But hell yes Flappletun for the far left!
surskitty chapter 55 . 3/29
Pineapplin, huh? Pretty good!

Do the Americas have verpom de terre?
brianwood978 chapter 55 . 3/29
I thought it was in order?
InBound2 chapter 54 . 3/15
I'm not sure what I was expecting from a Golduck chapter, but I do know that it definitely wasn't gang rape and drug addiction.

I actually studied up a bit on ducks after reading this to see if this was based off real life and holy crap it is, wasn't expecting ducks of all animals to be so rapey. Why have you cursed me with this knowledge?

Anyway, uncomfortable to read but also very interesting, just like real life. Nice job!
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