Noooo I at least wanted to see them kiss! I thought u said u were gonna have the together cuz u ship them! This is basically the same exact thing that happened in the anime T_T ughh damn it after all the time I spent reading thisdon’t get me wrong I still loved it! But nothing changed! The ending is the same as in the anime and the ending is what I didn’t like in the anime either!

Agh I love this story! This is exactly the way I wanted the anime to go!

Yass I hope to see some RayxZack (or Isaac) I love love this ship and I was really disappointed by the end of the anime when they didn’t show they end up together like I hoped! And yes I agree Danny was a huge perv

Wow, this is extremely impressive! Lovely job :)

Thank you for taking the time to write and especially complete a story based entirely on the game, not only was it wonderfully accurate but it was also very well written.

Oh man, I'm breathless! This chapter was awesome and stretched farther than the Manga or Anime. I'm soo glad you updated- great style and structure. I can't wait for more...

Man，I appreciate your speed… And Ray on B2 is so cool as she manages to fight against all the accusations with her coolness and calmness…Well so next time we would see the “Broken”or“Dark” now it's Zack's turn to get to know Ray…
Anyway,I will be there when you update the new chapter!
（Sorry for the poor English again~）

Amazing style... (*...*)b

Can't believe you are so quick! just before I printed your text so that I can read it when I am at 's sad news that new term will begin and I probably live a no-electronic product life for two
Hope at that time there will be a heap of your readers~
-emm..Back to this chapter.
Gray's floor is kanda supernatural~And I think it's a distillation of the digs much deeper into Ray's some people get bored of Gray's cliche I think it's pretty important when it comes to know more about Ray's characteristic. And
I can sense how Ray cares about Zack's life from your repeat of her “I need to save Zack”and so on.I get much surprised that Ray's so determined not to be influenced by the weird surroundings and the smell(really it's like a f art of the priest-from Chinese fans'joke)and command Zack to trust her for bond is getting tighter after so many things happened in the same day.
What's more,you are a great writer so it's time to give you a Chinese title:dalao,which refers to a guy who is capable of something~

Sorry I didn't review earlier…Actually I've already read chapter 9 several times since it came it takes much time to read it whole but it is worthwhile.
It's one of my favourite part-Zack and Ray are in the gas details added are so cute!
Ray's performance really impresses me as she manages to assemble the think about she's only 13…I totally admire 's so clever and calm~And after taking toomuch gas she tried hard to keep up with Zack's pace which really moves me qaq.
I am so regret that there are not many fans in China reading fictions written in English,or I would have recommended your novel to them.
Ah~My English is so poor that I cant fix my points clearly…
Now I am going to read chapter 10.I plan to translate your novel into Chinese when I graduate from junior high one year you permit me?

hey zack, I know somthing you can smash *wink wink* *nudge nudge*

i dont even need anime or games. ill just read this version and treat it as the truth lol.

I'm coming！Finally they are at B3!They have taken their ''wedding photos'' haha~I really want to describe my feelings in Chinese fans'way..like "hey,zack you took the wrong are just like a princess waiting to be saved！'' and “Ray truly possesses a'boyfriend power-Max' ”，if you know what I mean()~*It's because Ray constantly manages to save Zack ww and he's really a funny idiot to make me laugh all the way through the plays of electric the way,have you ever seen Episode NG（from office）?Really amusing to see them act like actors~
Love your details about them！When the bullets rain down,Zack grabs Ray's arm and pulls her almost into his chest.I like these details~
So keep going，hand me more "dog food"(still Chanese usage) !

SUPER！
I'm late because I was preparing for my exams…
I am startled that you've written so many words!Since I am a fic writer,too,I definitely have the same sense like"I can't stop until I finish this chatper"…It's just like a surge of thank you for your hard work! I've read the official novel but I think yours is much better than it.
And I'm going to read it more times and take notes or something like good words and sentences ww Ray's smile really impresses me and Zack's oath too.

Nice chapter! This was super exciting and made a great picture in my head! Thanks for writing! :)