Sad story, I loved this.

Great. But you need to fix the wall of texts! It's impossible to read!

Make a sequel

Oh god.

MAke a part 2 Please

karma is a bitch

You think too highly of yourself. Do you think you are a better writer than those that writes cringy fics? Well, guess what? You write the same cringy fic! Cringy at best, mediocre at worst. Stop writing, please. For your sake and all of creatures on earth.

great chapter! I loved the song and the ending has kinda weird lol. Great one shot!

Hold that L weiss

A bit too dramatic, Weiss don't liked Jaune because him don't accepted a "no" , but never to the point of belittle him or his family.

It’s really ironic how you talk shit about yuri Weiss jealous fics yet you write something just as bad and cringy.

First of all, the “break up” of sorts at the start. While I understand that Weiss has to be angry for this scene, you took her anger and Jaune’s way too far. The whole “you’re not a huntsman” argument was on point but Weiss’ words came more as insults than calling him out on his bullshit and then Jaune threatening to “kill” her was the point where I realized just how stupid and badly written that whole scene was.

Second, Weiss suddenly having a crush on the guy is also exaggerated and forced so hard it’s incredibly cringy. Yes, she thought he was after her money but that doesn’t justify that she suddenly thinks he’s super hot just because his feelings were genuine. If she really thought that from the start then she wouldn’t have disliked his advances so much but you already establishes at the start how much she hated him entirely so you pretty much contradicted your own logic.

Third, Neptune’s involvement. You clearly have something against him and wrote him as a complete asshole just to make Jaune look better which is as cringy as what the yuri fans do to Jaune in their Weiss/female fics.

Conclusion: Don’t call out other people on their bad and cringy fics because you’re not a great writer yourself. You’re just as bad.

P.S: I’m a slut for White Knight fics but I’m not gonna recommend this shitty fic to anyone.

Include spaces, paragraphs, and the such. No one likes a big block of text. Give them room to breathe. Make them like your first Flashback.

If you are looking for a weiss regret story look here
s/12829464/1/Weiss-Various-Regrets

Keep in mind that this is more on the humor side and has sexual content.

Very cute and sad.

A good read 8/10