Sounds GREAT! I hope you post more soon.

This sounds lit!

Normally I'm not a fan of short, sharp sentences but I think this style of writing works particularly well with this story. Someone who has been hurt and is unconscious hears muffled sounds and voices and doesn't want to wake to reality. Love the idea that Callen is there for Nell, as he would for Sam or even Kensi and Deeks if Deeks/Kensi wasn't in the role. It's great as a one off but you could possibly stretch another chapter or two out of it. Go for it as I'd like to see what happens next. Well done.

This was good you need to keep going cause it just makes you want more. Please continue and explain what happened to them.

Nicely done. Well thought out.

SPECTACULAR PLEASE ANOTHER CHAPTER OR HUNDREND

Yes please do more chapters please this is good

Welcome to the NCIS LA section.

This is really sweet. You could see in the episode that Callen was worried about her so this runs perfectly alongside it. Nell always comes across to me as the baby of the team and I can see Callen being more open with his concern with her than with the other tougher team members.

I'll admit to not being much of an 'I' story person but the way you wrote this was very well done and fits nicely with the story style.

You could take this further if you wanted to. Doesn't have to be romance if you don't want though I know there are fans of Callen/Nell romance. It could simply be that they become someone the other talks to. Search future episodes and see what moments you can pull.

Looking forward to seeing more from you here