Hey man! Remember me? Just into the third paragraph so far and wow... I absolutely love it. Unlike other db stories I read, your story actually has a believable power scaling system from what I've seen so far. The two or three zenkai boost (you have to be specific though. Its either two or three. Corono got either two or three zenkai boosts) tacked onto ssj which is a 50x multiplier from base. Your scaling actually made me believe that it was plausible and it definitely made sense that corono is able to beat scallio, though it was a tough match overall for the former.

Now Im gonna go and read the rest of it. Its a fun ride so far and Im looking forward to the rest. :)

Another great chapter! Loving this!

I’m thinking of taking a temporary break from this fic though for now. Hope you don’t mind. I’ll be sure to get back ASAP!

Hm! Good fight! Got MY blood pumping! Lol.

Whoo! Close one! But still, only Corono could get away, having no choice but to leave Caulifla! Hopefully he’ll find a way to get her out later...

Hm! An interesting story. This has caught my interest. Although I admit, I haven’t read the prequel to this. Doesn’t really matter if I do or not though right? I can read this as a stand-alone?

Corono is named after corn I know because I helped create him

So firstly I enjoyed the plot and your ability to keep it moving and keep things interesting. The pacing was good for an action thriller style story. I found myself able to sympathize with the characters and felt their emotions. It was also written well mechanically speaking with no notable grammatical errors.
Where I have to give criticism. So I felt that I wasn't immersed in the setting. I couldn't really imagine where they were. When it came to the action scenes sometimes they felt a bit lacking. Like when explosions happened I find it more intriguing when the explosion is described opposed to just told. like it's sound,appearance, and over all feeling. Also I felt a little detached from the characters during the fight scenes. Like I wanted to feel what they were feeling in that fight both physically and emotionally and I just didn't.
To conclude it was enjoyable and very effective as a first chapter to draw a reader in and keep their attention to find out what happens next. Just more details.

Wait does that mean no more CutxLazuli ? Or is it just because of the virus ?

Your opening paragraph is unnecessarily cluttered. The distinction between spaceship and moving room only serves to confuse the reader. Phrases like 'spaceship slash moving room' should be avoided in prose and saved strictly for dialogue. I would hyphenate compound adjectives like 'dark haired' and 'blue skinned'.

You need to use a comma before Cabba in 'his younger brother Cabba'.

Add some subtlety to your writing. You don't need to point out - twice, no less - that Corono is Cabba's older brother, particularly in such jarring fashion. Try and blend tidbits like that into the story naturally.

Don't interrupt the story to tell us in parenthesis about how an OC's hairstyle is from Xenoverse 2. Don't mention it at all, since it destroys the story's flow for no reason, or save it for an author's note down the bottom if you feel you absolutely must include it.

You need to differentiate thoughts from prose somehow (and stick to it). Some authors use italics while others use single quotation marks. I personally prefer to use both.

The best practice is to follow your dialogue like so:

"We are now in Universe Seven," she said.

As opposed to:

"We are now in Universe Seven." She said.

It's good that you're using some punctuation to close dialogue at least (and full stops are infinitely preferable to no punctuation), but I would recommend you close with commas instead of full stops.

I would advise against using phrases like 'Whoa!' in your prose and again recommend that you use them in dialogue or thoughts.

Work on showing rather than telling. You have simply told us that Corono's senses have told him that the oncoming ki is evil, that it's not friendly and is totally evil. You haven't shown or demonstrated why. At the very least, if you're going this route, describe it in an exciting manner - it feels boring otherwise.

Have faith in your readers. They don't need to be told the same thing twice, or indeed, multiple times. As I mentioned above, telling them something once is more than enough when you can allude to it instead. Repeating it is the equivalent of beating them over the head with it.

Consider the following line:
"What a bunch of weaklings!" The intruder snarled.
You should format it as:
"What a bunch of weaklings!" the intruder snarled.

'The intruder snarled' functions as the dialogue tag here, so 'the' should be lower case.

Beyond the technical components, a good first chapter should serve to get you interested in the story ahead. While I do concede that the ending was probably the most intriguing part of the chapter, the stuff that came before did nothing to get me interested in the characters. Since your story has a big OC focus, that's a significant issue (although I didn't particularly care for Kale or Caulifla here more than Corono).

The best thing you have going here is that your spelling and grammar are fine. That always gives you a solid base to begin with but you need to work on finding your narrative voice so your writing flows together instead of coming across jilted.

I could go on and say more but I would recommend you take the above into consideration first.

Lastly, I wanted to say that this is not a flame and it is not meant to discourage you. I may have been harsh and have nitpicked at many things but that was all in the name of constructive criticism. I wouldn't waste my time going to such efforts if I didn't see enough here to make me believe that you can take what I've said on board and grow as a writer for it.

I really enjoyed all of the chapters so far. A lot of fighting because this is the nature of the story. I like the background stories as well. I find this interesting and unpredictable which are qualities that I look for. Keep writing, keep it interesting, and I will keep reading!

Definitely going to be following this one! Keep it up...

Good start to the story, I'm intrigued and hooked. Broly is a powerhouse, so I can't wait to see how Corono and friends handle this mess.

interesting so far

Looks promising so far. Is Corono named after a type of vegetable? If he is, is he named after a type of Cabbage like how Cabba is named?

Just make sure the other Universe 6 Saiyans also get a focus in future chapters to keep it balanced and not favor the OC too much. As it is right now, it's acceptable, and I hope when you're more deep in this story that you'll continue to improve :) .