I liked this, but like, it's not finished. It's a pretty good story though.

Yeah, Sona definitely deserve the cold shoulder from Issei.

Road at least made an attempt to mend things.

But Issei should still be cautious of both of them.

Didn't see that coming.

Good poison ivy dialogue.

I understand have some kind of armistice with them and having some kind of understanding, but this...

They tried to murder issei and 2 people he cared very deeply about. Aneko nearly died in his arms for God's shake.

Yet he almost instantly, forgive the assaults, trust them, and join their fucking club!

He willing to risk their lives, and for what!?

I'm not saying outright fight them, he should be at least cautious/suspicious of them. Have them actually earn it.

The extra crossover doesn't make sense it's just a bad way to introduce girls for a harem that don't fit otherwise.

Its good really good. Interesting crossover that's for sure. I like where this is leading. Can't wait for the next chapter.

I’ve always disliked Ivy. She thinks of men as tools and disdains them as only good for destruction...because they’re vulnerable to the concoctions and spores she creates specifically made to subvert men’s minds. Destruction thing isn’t ever explained, though. So, one has a bad reason and the other has literally no reason. If it’s about forests; men grow farms and trees and build cities and civilization.

Then there is the whole Green thing. Both DC and DxD have nature being furious due to humanity causing great damage to it...except humans have not and the damage we cause is incredibly miniscule compared to even just small local areas, let alone the world. The writers like to think of Earth as a vast web of towns and cities a few miles apart with scattered patches of ever-diminishing wilds between them. Which is nonsense. Civilization is extremely small and rare separated by incredibly vast stretches of untamed and unexplored wilderness. Humanity is a speck. Even from space those dots of light are numerous tiny communities whose combined light together is only enough to form a tiny dot of light. Even cities require the light of many surrounding towns far and wide to make a single dot. We’re that small to the Earth.

It’s Earth, not Coruscant.

Besides, plants compete and choke each other out and even eat each other all over the world all the time far beyond what humanity has done.

Gotham is the original name of New York City and is still fairly common in the city.

I’m surprised Ivy tried anything. Issei was being willingly helpful, she would risk exposure in an extremely negative light, she has no knowledge of him or his connects...really her actions were insanely stupid.

I get the feeling Sirzechs was honestly amused by annoying them with the doorbell.

As much of a claim? Rias has absolutely zero claim to anything on Earth. Heck, Akeno was BORN on Earth and lived there BEFORE Rias and Sona came along. Besides, no one not native to Earth has any claim to any part of Earth in the slightest. Otherwise that’s invasion and conquest.

Rias and Sona could claim ignorance, but choosing to be ignorant by not trying to find information or even ask is willful ignorance and does not excuse anything.

Forgiveness should be given only to the repentant. If someone is not repentant and is forgiven, it encourages their bad behavior. That doesn’t mean one shouldn’t let go of their anger, merely that they shouldn’t let bygones be bygones until the perpetrator is repentant.

First, humans are nowhere near as violent as DxD’s supernatural. Second, fifteen is not a child. If anything, boys at that age are thrilled to fight.

Don’t give timeframes or specific times. People rarely have any clue what they’re talking about. Seconds are a very long time in a fight and skilled fighters strike four times faster than a snake.

I like where the story is going and their interactions.

Age of consent in Japan is thirteen, Issei is not underage. Also, do not capitalize the “g” in “Gods”. Capitalization is for when using a word as a proper-noun, a non-article and non-action verb in a title, and at the beginning of a sentence.

oh, disregard my last review, although i still think hes being too lenient, then again im not a writer, so what do i know?

on a side note, i do also believe you could benefit from more varied word choices, some of your sentences seem redundant because of it

so i get you "explained" it, but im calling complete bullshit on him forgiving them, if someone tried to kill my loved ones, id absolutely never forgive them, and i highly doubt he would just forgive them without even any conflict, its just unrealistic, a better route would have him at least stay angry.

emotions that strong dont just fade overnight

Agreed on the Asia bit I don't like her at all either.

An update FINALLY