Good one.

It’s now 2 in the morning and I have to work tomorrow but I can’t stop rereading this story. It’s just great!

This is your third story I've read, and I'm absolutely going to read your other ones. You are a brilliant writer! May I ask if you are German or Dutch? German is my second language and noticed you using "und" instead of "and." Just curious. I'm so very impressed! thank you for writing Fremione. My favorite pair, but it is sometimes difficult to find a well-written story. Brava!

This was a very lovely story! I think your English is pretty incredible for this being your first story you've written in English. You wove the tale impeccably and I really enjoyed the pacing of the plot. I look forward to seeing a sequel!

I love this and you for making it! Thank you

This was a really enjoyable read. Light angst and drama, smut that was not over the top, sweetness that wasn't too sappy (which would not really fit Fred), humor, and a nice ending that leaves us able to envision more. I do feel the need to let you know that some of the word usage issues did make it more difficult to read, simply because I was pulled out of the story at times while my brain was switching it to what word or phrasing I would have used as a native English speaker. But hey, I am not even remotely fluent enough in another language to write a story like this, so I am still nothing but impressed. That said, if you ever wanted to clean this up I would be happy to help if you don't know anyone personally who could assist you with that. Thanks for sharing your talent and imagination with us!

Loved this story. With english not being your 1st language you did great! A couple usage errors but nothing distracting. My fav Pairing is Sevmionesnape voice* ob-viously) butI like to gander at other pairings and this Fremione was adorable. Super cute, kinda angsty, but wholesome and adorable. kudos!

This story was great. You’re a great writer. Terribly underrated. You should get more reviews, honestly. But fanfiction does not receive as much traffic these days, especially with this pair. Greag work!

I loved this, but I want an epilogue. lol

May not Mai dear. that's the only error I've spotted, and can I ask if you're German? from another German

good lord, I know people who have English as their first language and write absolutely horridly. you write beautifully, and I'm enjoying this.

A very sweet and funny story! Better than I expected. A please surprise.

Couple of things.

First, your English is actually fairly good for it not being your first language. I will point out that there is a construction regarding possession that occurs in English and not in almost every other language. For example, in chapter two, you said "room of George" in referencing his short visit to St. Mungo's. In English, we would write that as "George's room". The 's denotes possession (in this case, that he's staying there). Of course, as you can see in the prior sentence it's also used as a contraction - as used above: "he's" "he is"; "it's" - "it is". It as a possessive is different. In that case the possession is simply written "its". Using an apostrophe there is a contraction as noted previously.

Second, I know you intended Lavender being the mom to be a big reveal, but the minute you revealed her existence - and her reaction - it was very clear who Rose's mom was. I'm pointing this out only to say that the guest review posted on the prologue was left by a troll. As some of us have been known to say online, "Obvious troll is obvious."

That said, I don't think you overreacted to their intended slurs, but I would caution you against giving trolls attention. They tend to feed on it like weeds and suck the life out of everything that surrounds them. It is hard to ignore trolls, especially when FFNet absolutely refuses to do anything to moderate them. That said, as the author, you can delete such reviews from your stories. It's been a while since I logged in, but there should be some option under "reviews" to let you view the guest reviews left on each story you've posted. You can then choose to delete any of the guest reviews you wish (including this one, should you so desire).

There is also an option on the first screen after you log in to moderate anonymous reviews. If you scroll down on the right-hand side of the screen, you will see at the bottom a question asking if you want to moderate guest reviews with a "yes" "no" ticker option to the right. If you choose yes and save the changes to the page, you will have three days after the review is left by the "guest" to look at it and decide whether you want to publish it or delete it. The three days is a bit iffy - I've known it to be two and a half at times. And I **highly** recommend forwarding any abusive reviews you get to the help desk (instructions on reaching them can be found by clicking the "Help" link at the bottom of the page). Maybe eventually they'll get enough complaints across the site that they reinstate the "prevent guest reviews" option instead of the half-assed moderation they "allow".

At any rate, so far I'm intrigued by the tale and interested to see where you take this. I'm glad it's already finished so I don't have to wait for updates. :)

This was nice :)

A thoroughly enjoyable story. I liked how you wrote the characters and their relationships with each other. I look forward to reading a sequel at some point. Thank you.