hinata smirking at her boyfriend naruto b

OMGGGG I LOVE IT

Daaaaaamnnnnn. And I thought what I just wrote was good lol this to me is a masterpiece. The sensory details played a huge part!

This was excellect.

Damn, this was so intense and full of passion. Although I wish it was a bit longer, this was a damn good little story. I really hope to see more from this couple but ultimately it's up to you. Nice work

Who created the fanfic "Finally"?

Who made the fanfic "Finally"?

'Fluff-with-plot', lol

I'm impressed. This is very similar to how I write Naruto and Tsunade's relationship, if slightly more... M-rated. /Slightly/.

Not bad at all. It was a very interesting and enjoyable read. Glad I could inspire you to write some fluff. I think.

Damn this fic literally cleanse my soul away from those trashy stories that supported rape

gawdayum! Is it just me or is the room getting hotter in here? I love how you come to interplay with the characters emotions to the flow of events. Hoping for more stories from you

Put M rating. It would be a shame to see a good story get the ban hammer.

Oh my. This definitely went in an M direction but certainly depicted the title breathless in a big way. Hinata and Naruto certainly have quite the married life. Thanks for sharing!

Adding the warning that the story had no apparent plot was a wise idea, though moving on, here goes nothing:

Hinata, as a character, has always remained true to her love for Naruto, and I think you depicted this perfectly. Her feelings are being portrayed nicely, so much so that I can vividly imagine the scene, as well as the looks they're undoubtedly sharing.

Naruto as a character is very powerful, likely the strongest shinobi to walk the earth. He possesses a kind and loving heart, as well as the power to force the maps to be redrawn, all from a single attack. Seeing his depiction of him was a nice reminder of the human behind the power.
Another good point here is that you've done something I rarely see; namely, Naruto activating his Chakra cloak during the act to further increase their unity.

The only thing I could poke at right here is, as you yourself said, the lack of a direct plot, as well as a few words that could be moved around to perfect the third-person-perspective. Otherwise, you've done a good job with a fluffy scene, one that also contained a slight exposure of lovemaking, as it can only be called in this case.

I hope you'll continue to hone yourself and deliver even greater stories later down the line.