Little tip- that first paragraph would be better if it was broken into smaller ones

At least Lori & Luna are owning up to their actions now but is it too little too late? The quotation marks helped indicate dialogue but new paragraphs for new characters talking will make it easier to figure out.

It's surprising that Luna would be one of the sisters to lead the "Hate Lincoln Bandwagon" considering the popular fanon of her being his closest sister. It's also ridiculous that Lori & Luna are still blaming Lincoln even though he was proven innocent but at least the fic acknowledged how ridicoulus their hate is. It was hard to tell when there was dialogue, I admit.

Sweet chapter , very sweet .

to answer some questions from guest ok the nude videos were found out during the making the case episode both Lori and Luna forbid anybody from looking at Lincoln video thinking that Lincoln had put them on their and being embarrassed and hurt to the point that they had only saw red when looking at Lincoln I know I making Lori and Luna look evil but they’re not when I go in to chapter 2 and 3 you will see their pain and embarrassment they are victims of Lisa and Luan and internet hackers and to no fault of their own the kids at school are calling them sluts they have attracted perverts from around the world who comment and say embarrassing things that no woman would ever want to talk about Luna believes her music career is over Lori boyfriend saw the video they wanted save that view for their wedding night it ruined it

You just jumped right in with no explanation whatsoever, normally anyone would get a pass when doing something like that if they already had written a few stories, but this is your first one and there's no set-up no anything, just an implied embarrassing video, that was never meant to be shown to the public and yet somehow got released by complete accident.

You didn't clarify what happened to the Loud Sisters and Lincoln that involved a video and would warrant the 5 elder sisters to give their brother the cold treatment.

Nice. Lets see what Luna and Lori will do.

The dialogue could be written better, but other than that it is really good

Not bad . Lets see were this will go

I liked it hope you continue writing this story!