Aside from Kirito being forced into wearing dresses and his masculinity being mocked faaaar too often, I utterly adored every minute of this fic. Truly an incredible read, great job!

Wonderful story, well written. I loved it!

It is a very good story, I hope you continue the sequel, a greeting, I check your profile for that ... bye!

Yes, the subtle changes to events is pasty if the appeal of stories like this.
Argo"s teasing was fun, and the change to the infamous bath scene was too.
What a difference an IRL kendo user makes!

its a harem that kirito doesnt know about :D

Very cute. Little Kazuto Asuna having a tea party is WAFF. Their friendship later likewise. The classic opinion seeking dying clothes shopping; a fun contrast.
Not solely cute, but good drama later. That moment when Kirito considers his canon "beater" run, but decides that his sister and best friend come first. It is like a crossroads showing how different he is here.

Why were the other girls not around for this last chapter? What a cop-out.

This was utter filth, and so are you for writing it.

That said, I stayed up all night to finish it. I hope you're proud of yourself.

Awh, I wanted Lisbeth (or Lizbeth?) to win. It's because Lisbeth would probably had married Kirito in canon if Asuna didn't interrupt her.

Anyways, I'm not complaining, because this story has been amazing. I don't have anything to criticize to be honest. The whole story has been amazing for me.

Hey I really enjoyed this story a lot!

I wish there was more to the epilogue, I wanted to see him meet all of his friends outside of the game! Still, what's there is satisfying enough to end it on, it's good enough for me to know that he's leaving to go meet them with Asuna, Suguha, and Yui.

I only have a few points of criticism I can think of. The first being Sinon. Her arc's resolution happened WAY too quickly, and she integrated into the guild way too fast. She was so adamantly against it, but then she spills her guts to Kirito, and now she has no qualm against it, and she got alng famously with everyone else right after. It would have been better in my opinion if she had some difficulties joining the group, and she hesitated getting to know everyone and such - having Kirito tell them everything off screen about her was another missed opportunity as well.

Second bit of criticism is not really all that bad, but I wish you had more chapters AFTER they finally all got together. There was so much build up for it, and then after it finally happens, we only really got half a chapter to see everything start to work out before they're thrust into their final battle. I just wanted to see more of it is all. Some of the earlier "filler" chapters that just go over their day to day life could have been spent here probably.

I can't really think of anything else negative to say beyond that, so I'll go over what I liked:

I like the butterfly effect of him meeting Asuna early. I love how it prevented him from ruining his relationship with his sister, and I like how because she and Sugu were in the game with him right at the start, he decided to not go solo, and instead stayed behind and helped everyone out. I like the fact that he prevented the Black Cats guild from dying, too. Him forming the strongest guild and leading the frontlines was also really good, and I loved the conflicts that arose from that as well.

I got to mention Argo here - she's my favorite character in this. You know what's funny though? Prior to this story, I had NO idea who the hell she was. I've only seen the first season of SAO, and then about ten episodes of the second season before I stopped. I don't even think she was in the anime, and if she was, I don't remember her AT ALL! So I had to google her to know what the hell she looked like, and then I was good to go. I loved her sense of humor, and she just seems like someone who'd be really fun to know. I want to also say that the chapter where she and Kirito got into a verbal fight about him risking his life and the fallout from it was great too, I loved to see how she'd grown, and her more vulnerable side was great to read.

I also want to quickly commend the whole harem aspect. While I think they all accepted it WAY too fast, at least there was build up to it. I like how you went to show that the girls all cared for one another just as much as Kirito, and that's my biggest thing with a harem. I'll read them, but I don't like it when it's just all the girls like the guy and that's that, no - all the participants must like each other AND the guy, I just can't see it working any other way.

I can't really think of more to say, so I guess I'll just end this with: I really enjoyed this story! Thank you for posting it, and I hope you continue writing awesome stuff. Even if there's never going to be a sequel, this does more than well enough on its own, so great job!

Super story! Thanks for sharing.

This was great and a different thing from all i have read i give you a big smile for choosing to do a thing that involved all the female cast have more time and get to all have their kirito for themselves all not just one of them. Way to go on that and keep up the great work

Wow, that was cute. Asuna sounds like an adorable little lady, Kazuto as a good little boy, and as for Suguha, my-brother-is-off-limits. The three of them watching TV is darling.

really great story

Thank you for this wonderful story. I’m sad it had to end and wished to see more, but that just means you did a good job. If I had to say one thing I wish you would’ve written over anything else is Kirito meeting with Asuna’s parents. His nervousness would’ve been delicious.