Reviews for Revision
TTGG03 chapter 5 . 9/13
You know, I don't see any dialogue about Danielle here despite the fact that Vlad definitely is involved in her creation and how Dani is essentially the character that kickstarted the whole plot. Maybe Dani ought to bring up the way Vlad yelled "YOU EXIST TO SERVE ME!" at Dani in front of not only Vlad, but Maddie as well, just to show how messed up Vlad is.
i'm iam chapter 5 . 9/13
I’m starting to get blue balls. I NEED the confrontation with the truth coming out. I NEED IT!
Kilaknux chapter 5 . 9/13
Gods sake, Maddie, you really will go out of your way to dismiss anything your kids say, won’t you? Oh there’s no way the man you’ve seen fighting your son and who’s made creepy passes at you could be lying, Danny has just misconstrued LITERALLY EVERYTHING HE’S SEEN, HEARD AND DONE.

Bah. Nicely done as always!
HalfaGhostGirl13 chapter 5 . 9/12
Wait, Vlad's not...being Vlad? Like he's had the façade of a villain? Or is he just lying to Maddie? Hmmmmmmm

Like from a readers perspective, even with Maddie's bias, he doesn't sound as threatening as in the show. Or as I had expected...
Nitewolf423 chapter 5 . 9/12
Damn he’s good at being bad
Invader Johnny chapter 5 . 9/12
Jazz may see through Vlad but Maddie's desperation to find Danny may not fully make her see through his manipulation, that being said her hope may be shattered in some way, I mean I still think things may go well for her.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.
Dp-Marvel94 chapter 5 . 9/12
Vlad is so dang manipulative. Or maybe he's just so deluded he believes his own lies. I'm honestly surprised he managed to pull the wool over Maddie's eyes. I was really expecting her to ask some pointed questions about Danielle since she should know that Vlad made her. But she's too absorbed, finally realizing that Danny actually is Phantom. No wonder her mind is still on what she did.
devilzxknight86 chapter 5 . 9/12
Can’t wait to see Danny destroy Maddie hope
makaylamann51 chapter 4 . 6/9
Yes, finally, now she gets to truly know.
Wingedzenith chapter 4 . 6/7
Such a great chapter! Thanks so much for updating. I love the twist on this one it is so different than many of the other reveal stories. I think the way that Maddie is coming to grasps with it is great. I can’t wait to see how she takes the better understanding that they are literally the same person. Hope you update soon!
i'm iam chapter 4 . 6/6
please update soon, I can't wait to see her reaction to what a halfa is.
devilzxknight86 chapter 4 . 6/6
HA. Take that same person.
Dp-Marvel94 chapter 4 . 6/6
Great chapter! I like seeing the plan to find Danny coming together. Jazz and Maddie going to Vlad for help made sense. And I loved that end. I look forward to Maddie's reaction.
facuf1997 chapter 4 . 6/6
Nice chapter, I look forward to seeing Maddie's reaction to seeing her assumptions go wrong again
Invader Johnny chapter 4 . 6/6
Maddie feels the guilt which is unsurprising and in desperation she and Jazz went to see Vlad for help and no doubt is getting more than what she believed she would, interesting.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.
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