loved it

I noticed this story just yesterday, and have read up to the current print by now. I like ot a lot, and hope you're not serious about taking it down when it's not even completed yet (here) as you mentioned become chapter 1. I hope I get to read the rest of it, since I'm very curious about where this take on P&P's continuation will lead us.

I wanted to ask why write a wonderful story like this one and let people get to liking it and then go ahead and take it down? I think it's wrong to hook in your readers with a brilliant story like this just to disapoint them, especially me as I am a big fan of P&P and Jane Austen, and I can't afford to shop on amazon where ou and some fanfiction writer sell thier stories, anyway just wantd to ask what's the point of writing for FF if you are just going to take it down, why not send your stories to a plublisher like othe writer, like Diana Plamer Julie Garwood, Patricia Briggs, they more than likey started like you and now are on NY bestseller list, anyway thanks ever so much.

anxiously awaiting the 4th book!

There was another name discrepancy I forgot to mention. Mrs. McClare starts out as Rebecca and at some point become Rachel.

So I just read the whole story thru, and its just as good as your others. I especially liked that you decided to do something with Anne - I've always thought she got a bad rap for no real reason. As far as I'm concerned, your books are the official sequels to P&P - they're my head canon.

There were 2 things I wanted to point out for you to look at though. 1 - Small thing, Captain Ramsey's brother. His name keeps changed back and forth between Harold and Herbert.

2. During the scarlet fever crisis... You stopped with the back and forth pattern you'd held to in the previous chapters, changing from one character's pov to another. And I know why you did, those chapters are pretty intense. But because of that, when you tried to go back to Georgiana, my first thought was, "Who cares what Georgiana is doing?!" I almost skipped that chapter altogether.

The way I see it, there are 2 ways you could even it out. Since it's a series of fairly short chapters, merge some of them together, move up the chapter where Mary announces she's pregnant, and keep your original pattern consistent. I think expecting the back and forth would make it easier to cope with. The other option would be to push Georgiana back a chapter. Have the big, "Holy crap, Mr. Collins is dead!" moment, go to Longbourn so the reader has a chapter to come down emotionally, and then cut to Georgiana. You may have a better idea, but those were the ones that immediately came to my mind, so I figured I'd pass them along.

Otherwise, I couldn't really find anything to critique. I'm looking forward to the next one.

I just re-read both iA Constant Love/i and iA Change of Legacies/i over the past week or so, and then when I came to the end of the latter book, I realized that you had started a third. So now I am happily reading away and will likely bore you with comments of adulation.

I know you would like constructive criticism, so I will offer some if I see anything, but I am so predisposed to adore this third book of the trilogy that "criticism," even of the building-up constructive sort, may be few and far between. I just LOOOOVE the first two books, and I thought that the dream sequences in iA Change of Legacies/i were brilliant! :D

I have copy-edited five Austen variations for authors Maria Grace and Abigail Reynolds, so if I see any glaring typos, I'll let you know as well.

Many thanks for continuing this series!

Warmly,
Cassandra :D

I want to start this review by saying how much I like your story, both for the plot and for the depiction of the characters. I did not read your previous works, but I hope to do so in the future, for your style is truly captivating to myself. It's rare to find a story where the characters move naturally through the plot, for very often the author forces his will on them; but you managed to avoid this mistake and this is a great achievement in my eyes.

The choice of depicting historical events through the eyes of the characters is another strong point in your story and I applaude your efforts. In my opinion, it's one of your stronger points and if you keep going down this path, you'll be greatly rewarded.

One point that I must make is the presentation of the various letters in the narration: I feel that you need to use Italics or space them from the rest of the text, as their style at present is quite confusing. I shall make other corrections as I progress in my reading, as I understand that you desire your readers opinion.

Thank you for your beautiful story

I noticed a possible typo, at the end of a paragraph. It says “hailing one of them take them to the ship”. I believe it’s missing a to

Sophie
I just finished a Season Lost, you are a wonderful writer! I started this when you first posted and realized I had 2 books to read before this, so I went on line to Amazon and purchased the first 2. I loved them as well. I love the detail in the way you describe our loved characters lives. Most authors do not do that, and I must confess that is my favorite type of reading. Will you let us know when this is released as I am sure I would love to have it in my collection. Do you have any idea when book 4 will be started, I am so excited for you to continue on with this story. Will you begin right where you ended, I hope so, I am so not ready to give up all our friends. I can't wait to hear more about the rest of the family and also to read about the places in the Mediterranean, a lot of which I have visited. Thank you again for this fantastic story.
Pam

Wouldn’t the Stantons want to meet their great-niece or -nephew? Only niece is written, but Georgiana wouldn’t know yet is she’s having a girl or boy.

I can't really say this is a lovely chapter, when all the signs point to trouble ahead, but it was well written and informative. I wonder how the weather will effect the Bingley's - if I remember correctly they are in the process of doing up an estate? Looking forward to more!

Wow! That's quite a shock, to be sent to China! And to go the long way around! So very exciting.
Also love love love the idea of Moll being unerringly proper when smashed. Hilarious!

In the paragraph about Georgiana's ball dresses you refer to 'invites' (noun). Would this not be invitations? Invites to my ear sounds jarringly modern, but maybe I am wrong

Another interesting chapter - I wasn't expecting to follow Catherine's story too, so that is a nice surprise.
One thing (and it maybe that I am pacing myself slowly, so it might have been mentioned in previous chapters but I have forgotten), but what point in the year is this? The Ramsey's have been in Bath around a month. Would they have gone in the New Year? I can't remember where you finished Book 2...

Still can't login - don't know why.

Another excellent chapter! In my last review I made some mention of wishing for a little silliness, and have found it in Moll. I have a feeling she will rapidly become one of my favourites as we see more of her. After all, we cannot all be mature and sensible.

The attention to detail is astounding. When you come to publish properly, I highly recommend including a diagram of the ship, and maybe a glossary of useful nautical terms so Google is not as necessary to full appreciate the story. Still, it is truly beautiful, and you have balanced technical terms well in the context of the narrative so a landlubber like me can still get a gist of what is meant, if they are not inclined to research themselves.