That was very good. Though I feel you jumped little too quickly in the alliance. Still, amazing work.

I recommend going through the story and rewriting it the pacing is really fast and unclear plus you keep switching from 1 POV to another POV

Dang

Did you not realise that all the words are bunched up and hard to read?

Ever heard of spacedock cause he has a video about ship types and how they should operate.

Some of the visuals I get but some your just copying from the other races in terms of design.

So a first contact situation in the 2180s interesting.

So within 10 minutes of meeting the humans want too make an alliance with the Quarians? That is so unlikely it could be considered would need months if not years of negotiations without someone kind of outside situation forcing the issue.

Quite bland and same plot as most human au fics

Not good.

I was going to continue reading. But after reading the battle for shanxi, I stopped. I don't tolerate failure when it comes to Technology or the strength of the ships or weapons.

This story is very interesting. It has some beauty mistakes like chapter 7, or that some conversations are to clustered which makes them confusing.
But, I like the story. I hope you'll update it soon

This story is a great example of a really well done au. the earlier chapters are harder to read as they run together, but that's a small price to pay for an engaging story. thanks for sharing.

Umm why are their repeats in this chapter ?

Put more space between scene changes for god sake this is so hard to read also please stop putting such large blocks of text it makes it difficult to read