Good job this a really good one usually when people put oc’s in a story it doesn’t work good but you did great good job!

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I have always wanted to know more about the father, seeing that he's the one that motivates Kinus into becoming a hero. Though it was nice to have this snippet of him, but I want to know more about him. Who is he? What does he look like? What is his Quirk? How did he die? I am so curious about this mysterious character. Will you be writing a chapter just mainly about him? Maybe you could write that instead of the fight between Kinus and Kamakiri, since we still have no idea who he is.

Oh, season three ended with a bang and after reading the manga, I JUST CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT SEASON! I am so excited about it! What about you? And then there's the movie, the Two Heroes. I haven't watch it yet, but I will very soon! Do note that the movie happens between season two and three.

Anyway, if you need any help, just PM me.

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It's a good chapter, Viper, keep up the good work! I like the little twists you made to the story, it always put a smile on my face. Good job!

By the way, since you are making Kinus fighting with Kamakiri, I do hope you know how to make it work. We have no idea who he is aside from the fact that he's from 1B, not his fighting style, his character nor his quirk. He is like a background character in the manga and probably only had a few seconds screentime during the entire anime. (Even though with the manga arc right now, you could see each and every one of 1B's basic character and quirk and his turn is coming up soon, but you did say you don't read the manga so...*shrugs shoulder* good luck with that)

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Good work, can't wait to see how it turns out :)

Tokoyomi and Kinus interactions are so adorable, I love these two so much ! I can see definitely see them running an agency together in the future. Keep it up !

Wow I was really scared there, thought he was going to get expelled for real. Murder, be it accidental, probably won't leave his conscience as easily. Looking forward to the sport festival, hope he at least gets to fight Todoroki again.

I like how you write the fighting scenes ! that was intense.
I wonder if he will sprout wings at some point?

Poor Kinus, no escaping laziness !

You're right that OC stories are hard to sell but that's alright, there's quite a lot of shipping stories or Deku with a quirk fanfics out there that makes me question how does it not bore people. Your OC is exciting, male and dragon traits at that makes it a fun read. His quirk ain't overpowered and dehydration is an excelent way to show his limits. The tactics against Todoroki were perfectly logical, as well as the way you write the characters !
I hope more people will take notice to your story ! I'm very glad to have stumbled upon this.

Bwahahahaha! With a target point of 10 million, what would poor Midoriya do in this turn of events? And what about Kinus? Who will he form as his team, will he be the rider or will he be the protector? Will he help Midoriya in his quest to stay alive in the game or will he fight against him for a place in it? I can't wait to find out!

Seriously I can't wait to find out. Please post the next chapter ASAP, but don't you dare trade quality for speed. But still, GO BEYOND, PLUS ULTRA!

Keep writing,
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Ps, have you watch the latest episode yet? All Might is such a troll. Haha hahaha.

the OC is nicely written into the story without being the center of attention of the main story or just being a extra. he's a part of the class, interacts with them and has a personal life.

Iam a bit confused with his Quirk, care to explain?

Oh, this is going to be exciting! I do love the Sports Festival Arc, especially the battles like Kinus do. I hope that he would do well in the tournament, since with this character, the outcome is bound to change a little bit. Keep up the good work, Viper, and keep writing!

Oh, I wonder if you are adding the OVAs into your story. I would like to see how that dragon of yours react in a fight against 'evil' All Might. (That and I really want to see Zombie Kinus! HAHAHAHAH)

Every time I see that this is updated I can’t help but get excited not a lot of action but a necessary thing to deal with two thumbs up from me