Please update soon

May I have more soon? I like this a lot!

aWWWWWW NEWTNEYYYYYYY

Loved it

“‘Even no-majs don't stammer that much when Mary Lou Barebone talks to them,‘“ ...was this in the movie? If it was...even I have to go, “Seriously?”.
“Newt looked to Jacob with a smile on his face, but it faded once he caught sight of me.” Why didn’t he feel her when she “wrapped her arms” around him?
And then he didn’t address why she’s there with them. No acknowledgment to each other at all.
And she’s good at magic on her first go. From the world where magic doesn’t exist she knows how to wave a wand without some backfire. Nope...
And the last few paragraphs has pure he “asked” and she “asked”.
“‘What's that thing in your case?’ she asked him as she continued her impromptu interrogation.” Like it could be “She demanded...”
“‘Who are you?’ she asked him again, this time more firm.” How about, “She repeated firmly”.
This was just minor nitpicking. Wasn’t bad chapter.

Haha, and the first paragraph was what I mentioned before. Not the worst, but still over describing.
If they’re siblings, and all female...I’m sure they’re comfortable changing in each other’s presence.
This is a not a Wicked fanfic, so I don’t really want to bother Googling whatever-Alpha-whatever’s outfit looked like...sorta killed the flow of the story. It could be rephrased to show her love for references. Like how she saw the similarity in that outfit to ones of the musical Wicked. Right now it sounds like the reader should totally know what you’re referring too. Which I don’t.
“For those of you who don't know, Marisa and I were abused by our birth mother until Marisa ran away and got the courage to tell Alyssa and Devin's parents.” No, I didn’t know. And I didn’t want to be introduced to that subject in a “For those of you who don’t know..” way. Pull my heartstrings a little more a weave the words into beautiful pictures so that I can imagine like I’m her and I’m there feeling that pain or feeling that awe as I’m in a world that shouldn’t have been real.
I’m going to the next chapter just to see how she deals with Newt.

Your summary was what got me curious. I didn’t really like this chapter because instead of slowly clueing me in on the character and her life, you just straight up shoved me her character profile. Like her fear of water for example, it could’ve been revealed during a point where it HAPPENS or where other characters noticed her avoidance to water.
At least didn’t give me paragraphs of what she’s wearing and what color her room was...
Just my reading preference.
I’m still going to check out the next chapter, but this chapter showed me your writing style. One that I’m not totally crazy about.

Oh my! I love this! I love how you incorporate Courtney into the movie! I can't wait to see more and for when you move to Crimes of Grindelwald!

loved it! more please?!

Looking good

Jacob is a awesome character! Can't wait to see where you take this story.

Awwwwww newt!

Interesting!

This an amazing fanfiction, keep going with it! I love it!

i love the suitcase, please update soon! hope you’re better!