Well done!

Interesting take on the Hogwarts Express.

This fanfiction is really interesting. I liked the story at the end of the chapter.

I sincerely hope you continue this story

Wow that was awesome
Full of mysteries
I enjoyed it very much
Thanks for the update.
I hope to see you soon with next chapter

First constructive criticism: Dialogue quotation marks are placed like so “blah blah blah”. My OCD tick was tweaking. Lol Second, Review: Great first chapter, though. Thanks for sharing.

I’ve read the first chapters of your story today. I’m most interested to find out what is going on with Hermione. I have several theories!

Disappointing. Another story about creepy old men lusting after preteens/teenagers like it is normal.

Enjoyed what you've written so far. Look forward to reading the rest.

This is really cool, hope there is more!

Oh that was a great chapter little confusing to but it was fantastic
Thanks for the update
I enjoyed it very much
I hope to see you soon with next chapter

This is soooo good! Waiting patiently for next update!

Great fic so far, love the details in Remus' thoughts.

Your plot line and premise sound good. Your writing seems pretty well done, too, but there are a few things that need to be paid attention to.

Remember, short paragraphs are generally only Two to three sentences long, sometimes going up to four or five if the situation calls for it, but never exceeding the latter. But after that, there need to be a break of space. Like literally, after the final period of the paragraph, press 'enter' once or twice depending on what you're writing on to make space and begin a new paragraph, sentence, or dialogue. Your writing is good, as I said, but it shouldn't look so cramped and squashed together.

Sentences or paragraphs shouldn't start off from the mddle of a previous sentence or with a lowercase letter.

If you're writing on a specific office or writing program, there should already be a general spacing preset, which is alway helpful. So long as you don't try and fiddle with it as I did once and made my writing look like a giant mess of words that gave me a migraine just look at it! XD

Dialogue is generally kept separate from most other parts of writing save for any after thoughts in the wake of a quote or set of quotes. Thoughts...I know that most authors like using different fonts like bolding or italicizing to separate out thoughts from conventional dialogue. I like doing that just as much. Why not try small and bold the diaolgue when Remus and his wolf communicate? See how you like it and feel about it, before adjusting your writing style.

You might also benefit from writing at the beginning of the chapter content or within whichever designated sections apply, the point of view they're from. POVs change and often if it's not pointed out at the beginning, the reader will read on thinking the entire story is from one character's perspective.

Don't be afraid to us one-liners, either. Sometimes we as writers can't help but use one lined sentences or dialogue on their own, unattached to a paragraph. Just make sure you have space before and after it if you do. Your biggest issue really seems to be space usage and implementation, from what I see.

Either way, the story sound good and with a few organizational tweaks, it'll look just as good.

Wow this is good
I am loving it very much
Thanks for writing this wonderful story
I hope to see you soon with next chapter