Wow I can't believe this was your first fanfic to be posted. I can't help but be immersed in this story as I was reading and enjoying their little back and forth. The writing and Hachiman's monologues seem so natural that I would think Wataru-Sensei wrote it. I'm honestly just blown away. Good job

asdfhjsklff So gooooood! I just can't! Love the way you portray the characters. Its so on point :D Thanks for sharing such amazing fic!

Its goooood! I almost cant believe this is ur 1st fanfic that u posted! Im so lovin it. Ahhh it is possible to get sequel out of this? Hahahahahaha i really want to see them more in your way of writing

It was so good. I love this

Hng~! My heart! It hurts!

I need insulin, stat! Too much sweetness, this story gave me diabetes.

I'm sorry that I can't provide much in terms of constructive critical feedback but you nailed it. Everything. I look forward to more of your work!

Holy shit this is your first fanfic?
From the way this was written, I would've thought you had a lot of experience in the fandom or something.
My man, I fucking loved reading this. I've been away from OreGaIru for a long while now, and this just made me remember all the reasons why I love this ship and this series. The characterization isn't off, grammar is perfectly fine, and the use of coffee to allude to the characters/development/canon events was nicely executed. I'm glad this will be the first fic (from this archive) that I'll have been reading in months. Hats off to you sir.

Mmmm... Hey, I really loved this! It was really sweet. Please continue doing fanfiction! I've got a few ideas:

How about you make some situation when Yukino or Hikigaya feel jealous? (Hikigaya with Yuigahama and Yukino with Hayama)

Oh, and I need to see Komachi calling Yukino nee-san, and Haruno calling Hikigaya onii-san and Komachi becoming all flustered and stuff... Loved it!

Very nice.

God bless your soul!
This is one of the most wonderful fanfiction in the whole OreGaIru fandom at . I really liked your style of writing.
I think you got just right amount of dialogues and descriptions, hence it's interesting to read. Your Hachiman is very much authentic. I always liked his bickering with Yukinoshita and his long-worded ways to describe simple things, his skill to twist aphorisms. There are not a lot of authors at who can do the same.
But I couldn't feel Yukinoshita. She was a little bit plain, only in my opinion, of course. Usually in dialogues you could feel her superiority, her strong will. Though it's only my representation about her, maybe I'm reading too deep or emphasizing my opinion about her too much.
The whole "...fortress. *Steel is my body.*" episode was humorous and sweet!
Thank you very much for your work!

That was a pretty good read. Looking forward to you next fic.

it is good yukino's personality is well made it good that is all I can say

Kuh! So cliche! Yet so sweet. And cheesy too. Even if this is your first time you wrote a fanfic, it's pretty fun to read. You should write more if i may suggest. You'll be a good author i bet.

It was good actually

I liked your story.
The grammar was not to bad actually. Apart from minor things it was really good.
The story was good as well but I missed some emotional depth? But maybe bouth are not your typical youths

Shame it's only a oneshot. Ah well, maybe you will continue it someday.