They say reviews are love, so I figure I should share how much I’ve enjoyed your story thus far. You’ve got both Hiei and Kurama down. It will be great tos we what happens next.

this a well written story, keep at it

Please do continue this story. It’s been amazing so far and I can’t wait to see how it all turns out. Evelyn is an amazing character and your writing is wonderful.

My dear, you NEVER fail to disappoint with your writing. Most writers do one of two things well — narrative or dialog. I know that I am much better with descriptive narrative than dialog. However, you seem to have the perfect balance between the two. Your narrative is always delightfully scripted prose, and your dialog is crisp and clean — showing a wonderful affinity and intimate knowledge of your characters.

Update soon

omg, I love it! :) I feel the inclusion of a woman like this makes this story a lot more mature than other fanfics haha... It's usually yaoi or het with no room for discussion lol! I can easily see Hiei and Kurama as bi... and OMG YOU'RE WRITING IS AMAZING... I love your descriptions and vocabulary - it's EXACTLY what I wish I wrote like... it feels like you have a good arsenal and you don't rely on the same overused lines I always see. :) Hope you continue soon ~! I'm anxious to see how Kurama and Evelyn will interact.

As always, you don’t disappoint with your chapters. This one was worth the wait! I really enjoyed your description of the Spring evening as well as the interaction between Hiei and Kurama. Trust Kurama to know that Hiei had been watching him!

And Hiei’s internal monologue while taking his frustrations out in the poor tree was spot on!

Brava, my dear!

Evelyn knows Hiei quite well! This goes without saying, but I’ll say it anyway... this chapter was marvelous! The dialog between Evelyn and Hiei was outstanding and so in keeping with his contentious attitude when anyone gets closer than he wants them to be.

And I have no doubt it will not take too much convincing on Hiei’s part to get Kurama to accompany him o his next appointment. The fun will be in seeing how he goes about doing it!

I really like this so far,

Two chapters in and I am already hooked on this story.

Your narrative is well-written, with crisp descriptions, as are your characters. Your dialog is also wonderfully written. Both pull the reader in and make them eager for more.