Nice take on what could happen under a Demise-ruled kingdom. Careful of some of your tenses, there a are a few that don't flow. Great character capture, more still coming perhaps? I just started publishing one of my own GiraLink stories, and would love a return favor R&R if you're still active.

Omg I can not wait for more ! This chapter is amazing !

Okay, I’ve been meaning to review this for a couple days now, so here I go, reviewing ;) I felt Link’s panic so much in this. Ghirahim is just A LOT to have to face and defeat... Poor guy is not gonna find that sword, I think :(

Also, I love Ghirahim’s thought process when deciding to spare Link, and the readjustment to the very grim realities of Demise. We don’t get much to go off of between them—Demise literally never speaks to Ghirahim in-game after everything he does which still kills me—but it does give you a good idea of what a thankless job working for Demise must be. I love that Ghirahim decides to hold this one thing back for himself.

Thanks for the updates! I was excited to see this continue!

Nice cliffhanger. I'm excited to know where this leads, update soon please!

Poor Linkie.. amazing chapter by the way, although so short. Thank you for this chapter and please update soon! I'm dying to know what happens next.

Woooooooah, the start looks amazing! *o*
Your writing style is very lovely and pleasant to read. :D
I really can't wait to read more of this fic!

I could say that this is a great beginning to a GREAT fiction. Your writing style is amazing and I really love how you describe the way Ghirahim describes pain . I fucking have Demise, seeing my 'lil Ghira suffer... great job and please update soon .

Dang, you really write these forging scenes well! It’s all so raw and dark. I’m really looking forward to this fic so much. It sounds like a unique take on the Link-being-defeated scenario, which could honestly use some shaking up. Thanks for sharing!