Don't really like how fickle Yuzu is... She's literally cheating on her partner of 2 days? No digging the harem, one-sided is better imo. Other than that, nice work.

Ah, I see you've already done that. Nice! From what I've skimmed, it seems to be getting good. I'm sorry, I should've looked for it in later chapters. Cheers!

Hey, just started this and noticed that this opening chapter has a lot of similarities with ch.15 of Citrus - A Compilation. Like same word choice and all. That's fine though, you probably got inspiration from that and added your own plot. In fact, it's great! I really wanted to read a continuation of that one-shot, so thank you for that. Maybe give some credit though. Hopefully you're still updating :)

Ahhh more jealous Mei, I LOVE it!

Hey, I love this! Great first chapter for your first fanfic!
I love that you wrote a "jealous Mei" here...I LOVE me some Jealous Mei, in fact it's the only character I seem to know how to write! Anyway I really enjoyed this and looking forward to reading the rest of the story!

Come on I'm rooting for Matsuri! Sure her methods a bit dodgy but she does mean well for Yuzu.
Hoping for an epic 3 way battle for Yuzu.
How about Matsuri do something that gets her in good books with Yuzu maybe soften the blow of her insights in this chapter.

Really enjoying it, keep up the hard work.

I prefer a harem where the girls fight for Yuzu, it is more interesting

Ohhhh shit please update soon :)

Now you have done it, Harumin doesn't deserve anymore hurt that she already experience from her childhood.
But I think it could have be the right moment for Yuzu to talk about her dad to her unless she already know about it.

I think " pity " is very strong word, there's just nothing positive about it, instead I would use empathy, especially since Matsuri can related to her.

Adding Matsuri thoughts during was really s nice touch for the chapter.

As for Mitsuko age, you would be right, and keep in mind that you have still one/two months until their school trip.

On this, I look forward for the next chapter, take care and see you next time.

dont make harumin suffer :'(

I think I like evil Matsuri. Mei is is her usual mixed signals-sending self, and Harumi is adorable. Yep, sound like a follow. I didn't notice any major grammar errors, so you are good there. See you next update!

I wanna know what will happen with mei hohoho

Damn ... I will say that I'm the kind of person able to watch something that most people would end up as a crying mess and me almost unfazed by it. But the last sentence made me feel on the verge if tears.

Damn it, how could you do this to our Harumin and ending the chapter here.

Honestly, good job, slightly concerned that Matsuri didn't even need to apologize to Mei after the event. And also about what Mei will perhaps do and mess up her relation with Yuzucchi.

On this, take care and see you next time.

Quite an enjoyable chapter, keep up the hard work.