| Reviews for Harry Potter : Potter Verse REDUX |
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Talon5Krrde chapter 11 . 6/28 It is a shame that you don't want to continue this story. I really like the story, and I like how you tell it. If you were looking for some ideas... You could add something to eventually allow for windless casting. Each Spell in somewhere in the Skill Tree. They might not all apply to everyone. All Spells have levels: Spell Level 1 - You have done the Spell at least once - It is not unlocked on the Skill Tree (Maybe all the Prerequisites are also Unlocked? Or learning them is reduced in difficulty...) Spell Level 100 - You can do the spell whenever you want, there is 0% chance of a miss-cast. Spell Level 250 - Verbal Point Casting Spell Level 500 - Non-Verbal Casting with Wand Motions Spell Level 750 - Non-Verbal Point Casting Spell Level 1000 - Colorless Non-Verbal Point Casting Spell Level 1250 - Wand-less Verbal Wan Point Casting Spell Level 1500 - Wand-less Non-Verbal Casting Point Casting Spell Level 1750 - Wand-less Colorless Non-Verbal Point Casting (MAX Level) Each New Spell and Spell Level add to the Spell Tree Branch (Charms... etc.) Some Spells might need the Spell Tree Branch to be at a certain Level before Unlocking. Maybe the Spell Tree might show some lost Spells? Or Spells at MAX Level might unlock new Spell Branches; The Wingardium Leviosa Spell Unlocks the Leviosa Spell. At Level MAX the Leviosa Spell Unlocks telekinesis... The Occlumency and Legilimency Spells/Abilities Unlock telepathy. You could also have Neville Longbottom (Godbrother) and the Weasley Twins Join the Game... |
Guest chapter 11 . 4/19 This last chapter was a bit repeative. Harry told his whole life story like 4-5 times again and again in this chapter alone. Boring. And the whole luck stat and percentage business makes little sense. But overall a good & great read. I loved it. A shame that you dropped it. I would have loved to continue reading. Hopefully you are still alive. And maybe, just maybe, you continue to write anyway. Your last note, the critique you had to fight with the most, that you write about sex involving 12 year olds... I think that shouldn't matter and you shouldn't bow down to some prude hypocrites/society. Personally I began to pleasure myself around the age of 6. I loved my mother and wanted to marry her. After watching an animal documentary about mating I dreamed about sex. Unfortunately sex stayed just that, a dream. But I continued to masturbate before I even produced sperm. Who knows if it would have been "harmful" to me if I had my dream fulfilled and had sex somewhere between age 6 and 13, with my mother or someone else. But more damaged than a unmotivated, unsocial, awkward virgin with depression nearing 30 is hard to top. Teens have sex, teens get pregnant, before age 18, before age 16, before age 14, and some before age 12, that is reality. A few many years ago (or in some countries still happening) children get married at age 12. Yours is fiction. With magic. And the MC has a mature mindset and is horny. I don't see how society can be so uptight and lable such a thing as taboo/forbidden. I guess someone put whool over all their eyes. And over yours too. Hopefully you can remove that piece of whool from your eyes to see this story as the masterpiece it is. Too many Wrackspurts it seems... P.S. Personally I guess it shouldn't be too difficult to increase all ages in this story by another year without altering anything else (or only minimal). Harry getting his powers 1 year later, and everyone starting Hogwarts at age 13, voilĂ . But somewhat ridiculous as well, you increased it already from 11 to 12, to increase it again feels wrong. |
timberwolfst chapter 3 . 3/18 When he added 7 to Luck and brought it up to 10, why didn't he get a bonus like he does every 10 points in his other stats? |
draehydraxis chapter 11 . 1/21 Ok I read the original version of this story and am glad you picked it up to continue. I love what you have done with it and am waiting patiently for more. Please don't disappoint. Hopefully you will have more up soon. |
Spidersauce chapter 6 . 12/8/2019 I feel like if he spent his whole school year he should have started learning more languages than just French :o |
Spidersauce chapter 6 . 12/8/2019 He went a whole year with no INT/WIS changes? Tsk, lazy author |
Spidersauce chapter 5 . 12/8/2019 If only Harry didn't forget about his Lightning Bolt spell. Or if he would actually use his flash step properly. I cry. |
Spidersauce chapter 2 . 12/8/2019 How is he supposed to ever train Appartion with that massive if a chance to splinch o.o |
Guest chapter 11 . 10/16/2019 Do not skip the lemon |
Guest chapter 9 . 10/16/2019 Add the twin he saved in the harem also and cho Panama sister and brown and pantsy |
Guest chapter 7 . 10/16/2019 Get the lawer and her assisten in the harem |
Guest chapter 1 . 10/16/2019 Hope sue storm becomes one of Harry girls because she would be is first friend from school it should be special pulse he as party function know |
Guest chapter 1 . 10/16/2019 Can you please update this story |
Black332 chapter 5 . 10/17/2019 Idk if you will ever pick this story up again and I just wanted to complain about this one thing. Most metals conduct electricity and Harry has his lightning bolt spell thingy. I get it that fire is cool and all, but that's no reason not to utilize everything you have depending on the situation. |
Shadow Phoenix 16 chapter 11 . 8/22/2019 UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! UPDATE PLEASE! |