Congratulations with the addition to your family ]

I enjoyed reading this story and the complexity of it and of what Mae is going through.

oh I love your book! see you soon!

Ahh I hate writing reviews on my phone. I missed some words and autocorrect but hopefully you understood what I was trying to say

I think the idea but I find the story hard to read. You need to work on your spacing. Whenever another character is speaking you should start a new paragraph. It will make every look much either and help the flow of the story and make it easier to read. For example.

I think the idea but I find the story hard to read. You need to work on your spacing. Whenever another character is speaking you should start a new paragraph. It will make every look much either and help the flow of the story and make it easier to read. For example.

“Mae, you better get up or you’re going to be late for Lit!” She groaned then opened her eyes, glancing at her clock.

“FUCK, I’m so LATE!” Her roommate giggled and Mae narrowed her eyes. “Sarah, why didn’t you wake me up sooner!” She scrambled out of bed , grabbing some clothes from her drawers.

“Mae, I’ve been screaming at you to get yo for the last 20 min. You wouldn’t wake!”

“Yeah right, you did this on purpose!”

Sarah rolled her eyes. “Why would I do that?”

Mae finished dressing and smirked at her friend. “Because Adrien broke up with you and since you’re unhappy, everyone else has to be too”

Sarah shrugged “Come on,” she said “I’m not that cold just gave her a look.

“Anyways I’ll see you at lunch?” Sarah nodded, smiling

So that in your story was one paragraph when it should have been about 8. I did change the a few words here and there. I noticed you had some grammar and some spelling issues. If you don’t have a beta or time to edit, there is a website that will help you find different words and tell you when your sentences are hard to read. All you have to do is copy and paste your story. You can even type on there. Just google hemingwayapp or hemingwayapp . com (take out the spaces.

Like I said you have an interesting plot but the way you’ve spaced things out most readers won’t read past the first three paragraphs. I’d hate that people won’t be able to appreciate your story simply because of that.

This seems like a really cool story! I've never found one quite like this before, I like how you're explaining everything so far.

Lady of the Late?

Uh oh...

I hope you feel better soon and remember that we, your fans/readers, are care for you! I found an anonymous authored pen that has helped me in times of grief so I thought it may help you too to get to a better place eventually:

When things go wrong as they sometimes will,
When the road you're trudging seems all uphill,
When funds are low, and debts are high,
And you want to smile, but you have to sigh,
When care is pressing you down a bit-
Rest if you must, but don't you quit.

Success is failure turned inside out,
The silver tint of the clouds of doubt,
And you never can tell how close you are,
It may be near when in seems so far,
So, stick to the fight when you're hardest hit-
It's when things go wrong that you mustn't quit.

Hope you cheer up soon! As ever your story is awesome!

Oh boy, now that Morgause has arrived it means Mae is really going to have to fess up to Morgana, no more secrets. If not, she’ll be just as big an idiot as Merlin was in canon.

Morgana should be told the truth about her having magic too, so she can be included in the practices. I can’t wait for Mae to give Kilgarrah a “reason you suck” speech for trying to manipulate Merlin and Morgana too.

Trust issues is definitely fitting.
Merlin's main issue is that he sees enemies everywhere - even if there are no enemies he will create them.

I don’t know what the writers were thinking, did they honestly not see the plot holes of Kilgarrah? And Morgana turning evil could have avoided easily, so poorly written. I think Uther and Kilgarrah are two sides of the same coin, both equally stubborn and stupid, refusing to blame themselves for the trouble they cause. I’m glad you see that too. When is she going to come clean to Merlin?

A very interesting idea for an OC. I especially love the possibility that Morgana might not become evil (her turning evil was poorly written, it’s so obvious it could have been avoided).

Up to now it is an interesting idea.
This new character is quite unique, although I am afraid she is going to be manipulated by Merlin.
Your reference to the other characters sounds promising - in both ways. Do you mean the medival version or the future/reincarnated ones? However, continue.