Oooh I loved this start!

this story is about absolute nothing.
boring AF.

I think you misunderstood something about clones, even in Star Wars is not like they can just make an exact copy of someone, they just can "make" another being with the exact genetic code, but this new "being" would have to start from 0 so she shouldn't have the original's memories

Hm. As an addon to my previous review:
Please lose the smut. It's distracting. I keep bleeping over it and missing relevant text.

... and you might consider getting a Brit-picker to help you with phrases and words that are simply not used in the UK.

Okay, a few peeves here - please do not feel flamed, it is just food for thought:

As an old fan of Star WARS (the originals, which I watched in the theater when they first came out, so, yes OLD fan) I understand there is an accepted lingo in the Empire. A standard language, so to speak. But it is not English.
As an old fan of Star TREK, which I watched even before the name "Luke Skywalker" was ever spoken, I understand and accept universal translators, so let's go with that. Assuming that Fay has one such nifty thing and communication is not a problem - this would still not include WRITING. A Klingon writes his own language in his own letters, even if a machine makes his spoken words understood to others in the Federation. Asking how a name is spelled is completely irrelevant, even on our own little planet. Ask a Japanese how they would spell "Han(n)a" - and you'd get one Kanji or two Hiragana, not five letters.
Then the old question of age... so she is five hundred years old and he one hundred. Well, terrific. How long is a day on the planet they come from, respectively? How long a year? Which universal standard is used? A year on Mercury is shorter than that on Earth is shorter than that on Jupiter. And that's just our own solar system.
And now for my main whiner: Why, oh why use present tense?
Other than that: premises are good, I will read on, even if I absolutely loathe present tense stories. Which in itself is a compliment for your story, really. I would just click that little arrow to the left, if I didn't think it worthwhile.

I loved the story. Also I was hoping for action well Harry going to war an all. But I know it's good ending.

It's not anywhere near as good, because your fucking grammar is that of a mentally challenged dog. Pick a fucking tense and stick to it. You change tenses multiple times in the same sentence sometimes! Good god. How did anyone pay you for this garbage?

Mostly a little bit of plot wrapped around several smut scenes. But has a powerful, without being ridiculous, Harry and some good potential story lines.

This was a fun read.
Even though I skipped most of the smut, this fic is pretty darn good.

A great story here. I wouldn't mind reading a sequel to this one.

good

little bummed that is the end, but great story!

It's not anywhere near as good, because your fucking grammar is that of a mentally challenged dog. Pick a fucking tense and stick to it. You change tenses multiple times in the same sentence sometimes! Good god.

Great story!

I hope you make a sequel to this one day good job