...holy crap it's like everything involved in shitty 13 year old fanfics has been condensed into one story for ease of access. Being edgy isnt gonna take you far if your basic grammar and plot points just...dont make sense.

Reading that actually hurt. In the "holy shit, someone actually wrote this and thought it made sense" kind of way.

DUDE THAT WAS AWESOME BUT SAD, WHY NOT A HAPPY ENDING BRO?

Thot slayer deku

There's not a general option I can select so I'm just leaving this review under the first chapter. This fanfic starts fine, good even. The first chapter was very enjoyable to read (flaws aside). Chapter 2 was fine, unneccessary Uravity and Iida relationship for melodrama but otherwise fine. After that it just takes a nosedive

I respect the fact you wrote this and put it up for us to read, but this is just not good. My issues

unneccessary melodrama, you want a Toru Deku relationship, so do I. Don't write it as if Deku is a product of a failed relationship with Uravity. Fan fiction is supposed to be written with respect to the characters and what makes them tick, you have destroyed Iida, Uravity, and Deku.

Iida the ultimate moral compass engages in relations with a girl that's already taken?

bull shit

Uravity cheats on the person she loves and than proceeds to treat him WORSE THAN THE CHARACTER THAT TOLD HIM TO JUMP OFF A BUILDING

Deku being an esgelord?

no, no, and no

as for the other issue, your GUM, is all over the place to the point I had to reread paragraphs multiple times to make sense of what characters were saying.

I absolutely can not suggest this to anyone to read. Please work on your technique nd get some test readers to correct errors.

as it stands if I was ever asked to point out how cringey fan fic can get, I'd go to this

Danm... that ending was sad. I enjoyed the story, there were some major errors in wich entire sentences would be scrambled, but I enjoyed it anyway. I hope to see more from you in the future. (I'll probably be logged in next time though.)

Please. For the love of everything holy and cursed alike. Get a beta reader. There are errors in practically every single line and they're quite discouraging for a reader trying to read your story.

Yo u should make sequels following the other six

Your making me cry dammit

Good story. Glad you were able to finish it. The ending was meh for me in my opinion but that’s because I’m a sucker for happy endings. Anyways, hope you keep up the good work with your other projects.

I'm going to miss this story.

Before my phone cut my sentences off like the universe was trying to me from saying: gravity-hoe and sonic with glasses deserved that beating that Izuku was going to give. Also If there is another piece of this story coming then I would expect that this story doesn't bend back to "oh everything is fine in the great dorms of UA" or "gravity-hoe and Izuku are made for each other (not that I'm kink-shaming the uradeku fandoms likings and whatnot)". Also if you see this just keep up the good work and don't let anything or anyone backseat drive your story that your working towards.

P.s: Red the Pokemon Master; you must ship gravity bitch and Izuku, its not my cup of tea but I won't tarnish people's distasteful choice of pick. But note to self in a story like this when you've been kicked while down I would expect or hope that if you where in it you would not just forgive a person so easily; because in the long run I can just feel people would hurt your feelings then instantly get back into your good graces in so called "good friend" terms, but other than that I had a more critical thing typed up but it just didn't vibe right with me. ((Moral in what I wrote; don't willingly give your trust so easily, it will come to bite you in thw backside later.))

In my opinion gravity-hoe deserved all of what izuku was gonna

Damn that's was good I really like this

Damn it man you should have just let him have his revenge. Grab the bitch, punch with a rage powered fist her face breaking her nose, jaw and teeth and wreck her pussy ass boyfriend. If the others want in on the action well fuck them too. If he had the teachers coming in to he could have wreck their asses too with the only time he might have some trouble would be a combo with Eraser, Midnight and Cementos. But even then he could have taken them all out along with the police if they were called too. Him being sent to the police station for a couple of days until they released him.
You have no idea how much stress you can released from that, it quite therapeutic really, just letting everything good and be consumed in unadulterated primal rage.