Down with Critics United!

They are the cancer to our society.

The root of heresy needs to be burnt to crisp

with over thousand innocent souls without remorse or guilt thereafter.

No sacrifice is too great and no treachery too small.

Remember, we all are walking under the immortal shadow of Him.

His light shines so brightly, it will guide us to our foreseen destiny that is in our grasp.

A great moment we all should not pass.

Praise Be The Emperor of Mankind!

If you are on the same page, cp this message.

And Bella119 is dumb.

Hybrid of Fate is nothing. She needs mental help.

cathrl, do u want to be my daddy? I won't promise to be a good girl :D

CrystalRei should quit.

Now onto the actual review:
The night was deliciously cool. Heather had a slight headache, and rubbed her forehead. The grass was poorly maintained, and overgrown trees hung down everywhere, shedding loose leaves over the yard. Couldn't they get a gardener in, at least like every month or so? It was darker the further they went out. David listened to Heather vent about how dumb Country Club Courtney was and made supportive mmms in the right places. Heather put her empty glass down on the little white garden table.

I yield to no one in abhorrence of violence. :-)

Hi! I read the wiki article about this movie to review this.

Characters - this was probably the strongest part of this story. When I first read the Wiki article, I was like, "Okay, so these are all horrible shallow people." I didn't really think they could be sympathetic at all, and in the opening when Heather Duke is rejoicing about the death of her "friend" and gloating about being on the news that just confirmed that, but as I read on, I was surprised to see that I was beginning to sympathize. You showed how Heather Duke's warped ideas were born out of some very toxic friendships; she'd learned to pounce on any form of weakness or else she would be the victim and she's not quite capable of being as ruthless as she tries to be. The way JD was portrayed was nice as well; you make it clear why Heather is more drawn to him than she wants to admit; he's an interesting person.

Writing: Very polished and very easy to read. It's a good mix of witty and down-to-earth. Which also reflects your POV character. Something to consider is might this have worked in first-person POV? It's completely limited to Heather Duke's POV anyway to the point that it almost feels awkward at a few parts to read it in third person. It would also somewhat help the awkwardness/confusion of repeating "Heather" so often in a few of these paragraphs (which is pretty much inevitable in a story where three characters all have the same name, I know.) I know first person has it's drawbacks but I would consider experimenting with it and seeing how it might turn out.

Plot: From what I can tell the plot is mostly based off what happens in canon, but you added some scenes between JD and Heather Duke? I gotta say I found it a little confusing to parse JD's motives in this. Why go to that party with Heather if he's so disgusted by her? What did he want out of blackmailing her? It might be something which is explained in canon, so ignore this if it is, but it was confusing to me.

Ending: This is where I'd make a suggestion. The ending seemed a little abrupt; going from back-stabbing to snuggling and hair-brushing so quickly. Granted, I get that they were already "friends" before this, but it feels like after what's been happening it should take a little longer for them to be so intimate. I will say that the message Heather Duke takes from her experience, and how she begins to realize who she really wants to be was perfect, especially the part where she remembers being friends with Martha.

Good story! I genuinely enjoyed reading it!