This was incredibly well written. You handled such a deep theme like this with poise and grace and I really liked reading about Padma. A very interesting read!

Wow. Definite kudos for the topic - people are so weird about that...
I love how Padma moves on, but still thinks about the child and what they might have been. That makes perfect sense to me, and it was a nice way to end this.
Now I can't help but wonder if she'll ever tell Dean about that child someday. I guess my only "complaint" would be that now I want more...

I love how well you handled such a... delicate subject. People are always going to have an opinion on abortion, so I have to give you all the props for tackling it. I love the way you characterised Padma, and that she didn't just pretend that it never happened. I love that you made her remember the child she almost had. Your flow was perfect, not to fast or slow and the emotion in it is palpable. Very well written, love :)

I love how delicately you handle this topic. It was done so perfectly. Padma was a great choice for this. Everyone would automatically assume that a Ravenclaw wouldn't get themselves into a position like this (which is totally ridiculous but whatevs). I like how Padma never regrets her choice, but that doesn't stop her from mourning a child she never got to meet.

I love how her decision never waivers, even as others are trying to convince her to reconsider. It wasn't a decision that she just made spur of the moment; she analysed her options and decided that she couldn't give the child what they would need. It's still so heartbreaking that being a wizarding world isn't kind to children who need adopting because most of them are Purebloods who only want children of their own.

I think my only criticism is that I wanted to see Dean's reaction to finding out Padma was pregnant. I mean, it wasn't necessary and the story is beautiful without it. I just want to know. Great story, babe.

I don't necessarily agree with the subject matter in this, but putting that aside it was really well written. I can't put myself in the mindset of someone ever deciding to get an abortion, so I can't really comment on that, but the way you wrote her fling at the bar, and her finding out she was pregnant the second time was really well written.

You tackled such a tough, potentially dicey subject with an ease that I am in awe of. I like how confident Padma was in her opinions and beliefs, all the yas for body autonomy and feminism in that regard.

My own opinions on abortion and politics aside, I love the word mellifluous and I like how you didn't shy away from any details or take the easy way out. You bookend it with mentions of the future, how happy Padma is to have a baby with Dean but at neither point do you simply gloss over the loss and grief of the previous pregnancy.

The way you wrote the one night stand was really classy and I adore one-sentence paragraphs, I'm a seriously big fan of how punchy they can be. Having 'Maybe if she'd been sober' on its own you automatically pause to consider it. Then to repeat it, as though mimicking what her thoughts must have been that day she found she was positive, desperately thinking what if's, it was brilliant.

Padma's such an underrated character but you bring her to life and make me want to just read more about her which is one of the highest compliments I can pay. I am falling in love with her.

Your Feedback/Grade for Assignment #1

Examiner: The Crownless Queen

Grade: 19.5/20 - O (Outstanding)

Feedback:

I found the physical description well done - they really worked with the story, giving it context, though you might have tried to describe the setting a bit more instead of just the characters.

I really enjoyed Padma's characterization in this and the reasoning behind her actions. Choosing Padma for such a plot was unusual but it worked well, though the plot in itself could have been more original. This was mostly Padma-centric but I liked the interaction with her random one night stand. The flow was great. The flashback fit seamlessly into the story and the scenes flowed perfectly. The prompt was there. I liked how it was used in a present/past way too - that was a very interesting choice.

The plot could have been a bit more original but it worked great for this story. I really enjoyed reading this. It somehow felt longer than it was, but not in a boring way - more in a way where I felt as though I had read all the backstory for this already, and I loved it.

Nothing to say on SPaG.

Prompt was in the AN and word count was okay.

This was an incredibly-written fic.
The flashback contrasts so much to the emotion Padma was currently feeling. I thought that was a really interesting perspective to use in the story; it shows how much she's changed.
I also love the way you develop Padma's character; she was so young, and still so strong to deal with all that by herself.
I honestly just wish this was longer, so I could see what she tells Dean, and if she ever admits to him or Parvati about the child who almost was. But that's just because I love your writing; this was beautifully done as a drabble. Lovely job x

oh jesus, this was a ride
i love the foundation for all of padma's feelings - everything felt expanded upon and nothing felt incomplete
i also love the hint of padma/dean
i spotted one spag thing -
[A cute, presumably Muggle man] - comma after 'Muggle', i believe
the whole flashback part was great; you wrote it in a way so that i could feel padma's youthfulness and her want for rebellion and her hurt, also, with the abortion.
ouch. the healers trying to talk her out of it makes my heart hurt, because a. the healers are so pure and b. i feel like, if she was older (like with her current baby) she would keep them and them trying to convince her not to abort it just rubs salt in the wound
i really hope one day she tells dean about the baby that almost was 3

This is a really touching piece. Keep writing

Beautifully written. Loved it.