Ok, I read a lot of fanfics and can generally forgive grammar errors and loss of continuity (Harry has occulmency shields at first and then 40 chapters later he doesn’t?), but there are a few things that I have to correct when and where I can...

A nuclear reactor going critical is NOT a bad thing, or scary... It’s just starting it’s reaction aspects, and is nothing more than just a fancy way of boiling water. Plus, there’s no way that “every reactor in the world would suddenly start” doing anything, because at any given time, several of them are shut down for maintenance, refueling, and whatever else. Plus, there are also several hundred that civilians would have no information about because they’re on submarines or other military vessels... And then you have to control hundreds of people at EACH plant in order to cause real problems, because of all the safety aspects that you have to override or disable...

I operated a couple during my 12 years in the navy and I’ve been in the civilian power business for 14 years and I have a hard spot with my livelihood being slandered due to lack of knowledge...

I'm getting real fucking tired of all this back and forth between the past the present, flashbacks, original world, alternate world.

This flashback came out of nowhere, was not needed and honestly until that point the story was doing just fine. It would have been so much better if Harry figured out a way to unlock his magic and barely make it in time before his death and then meet his wand in his magical core and do the whole speech and foreshadowing about this great Evil that needs to be defeated or whatever.

To me, it feels like the flashback was written by a different person. I mean, all this time we've always been shown how Harry is progressing further either through studying or his interactions with other students and professors and suddenly from nowhere, the style changed to now telling us what has happened after Harry defeated the Troll. Personally, I find fanfiction that "show instead of tell" much better because you feel like you are on a journey together with the characters instead of just having a lot of info dumped on you.

But that's just my opinion, I guess.

Thanks for the chapters!

I can tell that you have no idea of stamina . Running two kilometres means a person has decent stamina . And running does not show stamina perfectly . Neither a boxer , nor a sprinter will be able to run as much as a marathon runner .

Idk if this one is the original, but I've seen so many clones of this that are pretty much the same

Great story

I thought Harry had natural shields. Dumbledore tried entering his mind before and couldn't

Bro splendid like everything about this story the detail, the plot, the character development it’s all so spectacular.

vary enjoyable read I was riveted

Hey, I found your story since there's some asshole on Wattpad named HarrisEjaz who's stolen up to 6 chapters of your fic pretending it's yours. Just thought you should know.

This was a great story and I really enjoyed it. The interactions between Harry and Lillian was amazingly done and Lillian's character as a whole was nicely written. You had me on edge multiple times throughout the story. Really liked the dimension travel twist and it would have been nice to revisit that world and see how the other Harry grew from meeting elemental Harry. That being said, I still have a few problems with this story. First off, I feel like Luna in general was lacking and it really didn't fit with your story. If you're going to give her all this power and whatnot, at least develop her character like you developed Lillian's and Harry's. She felt rushed and just underappreciated and under developed. Secondly, the large amounts of exclamation marks and question exclamation marks (!?) used in the story was really not needed. The dialogue felt forced whenever you used ! or !? and made me die a little on the inside each time you used it. Overall, this was a great story with a great OC. I do sincerly hope you write a sequel.

Why did McGonagall keep Harry's key? If it belongs to Harry, then he should be the one keeping it. After all, it is how Harry can get into his own vault. I always thought it strange that Harry couldn't keep his key. How did he get it in other years?

Alright, honestly this is the BEST Harry Potter fanfic story I’ve read I love Lilian and Harry’s interactions and this is my 6th time rereading it .. It never gets old and I love everything about this story I HOPE you could maybe give us a sequel . But you ended the story on a good note and everything about it was perfect best story I’ve ever read in my life I love it and THANK YOU so much for providing us with this story .. Now I’m gonna wait 2 months and reread again to have it fresh in my mind ..

My only complaint about this story is the luna crap

This story was an amazing rollercoaster of Action, romance, intrigue and great concept. Very original. Great characterisation of Lillian. Really loved it.
This is going to be in my list of stories that i read twice a year.