Amazing job with the characterization! Everything felt right out of the show from the banter to the fight scenes. And i gotta say, great job on making me afraid of Negaduck. The way you wrote him, I was genuinely terrified. Can’t wait to see more of Red Nova in the future!

This was... I can’t think of words. It was so POWERFUL from the beginning to the end. Starting in the warehouse with the slow realization of what her situation is to the counting down the seconds (that was some amazing pacing and storytelling) to the newscast. And I adored the fact that Darkwing closed us out. He had the last word, so to speak, and I love that.

You can be sure I’ll be rereading this again and looking forward to your other updates, whatever they be. Very well done! I hope you are proud of this because it’s definitely something to be proud of.

~RS

IT WAS SOK GOOD! Everyone was in character! The banter and the puns were amazing! And it was so like the cartoon I wanted to cry! I could see it all perfectly in my head; you really have a great grip of the characters and how to use them in a scene to your advantage.

The vacuum banter between Darkwing and Launchpad had me ROLLING it was so funny and perfect!

I’m so glad Negaduck wasn’t successful (I mean, he never would be if Darkwing’s there!) but I’m so nervous for Ellie cause this can’t end well ...

Well done and good luck with the next chapter!

~RS

I was completely RIVETED by this. When I reached the end of the chapter, I pushed the “next” button without thinking, desperate to see how it would all play out. This is... it’s so good. I love the world you’ve painted and how this mafia plays into the St. Canard we love and ties into the villains we recognize.

The first chapter I could see as an episode. The banter was AMAZING and everyone was in character. Quackerjack is super hard to write and you NAILED him. His Mr. Banana Brain cameo was icing on the cake.

The second chapter with Negaduck being just... well, Negaduck for lack of a better term. His impatience, his hatred of everything Ellie’s making because he wants it bigger and badder (the drama queen) was so spot on. And STEELBEAK! I loved him. It’s so ominous, hearing he’ll call her at some point in the future.

And this chapter. Poor Ellie, but she did it. She built Negaduck what he wanted and we got to see Liquidator and Bushroot! I was so excited. I really like Ellie! She’s tough but still vulnerable and super smart and yeah. She’s great.

You’re pretty amazing at characterization and have a great ear for dialogue. I’m so excited to see what happens next!

~RS

A very good chapter, it's nicely written and I like your oc, she fits in nice with the rest of the characters.

Interesting story, I can't wait to see where it goes. You write Quackerjack and Megavolt very well.