This was a good fanfic. However, the forgiving at the end triggered kinda triggered me. How could a child forgive a family for treating them like dirt? But still good fanfic anyway.

I hope do a epilogue to “brawl on the family” as well because there something that is needed to be said about that episode

Exactly how i envisioned an actual loud house episode to progress.

Kid friendly conflict, humorous dialogue, warm moments, no bad language, sad and silly lines, a happy ending.

If No Such Luck were 15 mins long, it would have gone almost EXACTLY like this. Wonderful job!

Will you be doing one for “brawl in the family”

Wearing a squirrel suit for is not safe for your health on the beach

Good take on the ending of the episode. For me, I didn't really put much stock into the episode when it first aired, I mean, it's a cartoon and it's not to be taken seriously. Until I've been reading fanfics about the episode and I realized how horrible it was.

Also you should probably report Warriorguy, due to him saying some horrible things about you.

Excellent job!

This is terrible FanFiction.

Not only did Lynn threaten Lincoln to come to her game, she blamed him for her loss. Isnt the first rule of sports to have a good time and show good sportsmanship? Who cares if you lose? It's just a game. Yet, you did nothing to address that. What happens when she loses another game? Is she gonna blame someone else? Also, Lincoln did tell her that he wasn't bad luck but she insisted he was bad luck. So Lincoln DID correct her, but she was too thick headed to listen. She could have been a good sport and accepted she wasn't good enough, but no, she just has to be a sore loser.

The next day, Lynn started the rumor again when she told Leni that Lincoln was bad luck. Again, Lincoln DID correct her the day before but she didnt want to believe it. Also, how long has Lincoln lived in the Loud House? 11 years, right? Has any bad luck happened in that time? Lynn's remark seemed out of the blue. When Lincoln confessed to his family that he was not bad luck, Lynn has the audacity to claim that since she won her games while Lincoln was not there, he must be bad luck. And the whole family believes this. Even some of the kinder sisters, like Leni, Luan, Lana, Lily, and Luna felt like they were manipulated by Lynn. This is where the infamous "step further away from the house" line comes in. They let superstition direct their behavior instead of logic. They stopped being a family at this point. What makes it worse is that even though they drive him home to stop the heat stroke, they're the ones that put him in that position to start with. It's like taking someone to a hospital to treat a gunshot wound that occurred after you shot them.

What kind of "loving family" kicks out one of their own and forces them to sleep outside? Anything could have happened to him. He could have been kidnapped, beaten, shot, stabbed, or caught a cold and died. How were you going to explain the death of your son?

Rita even asks him what he thought was gonna happen. How was Lincoln supposed to know that they would take it that far? He's not psychic. And it's not like he held a gun up to their heads and made them kick him out. They did that on their own. Aren't the parents supposed to be the responsible ones? Aren't they supposed to know better than their kids? They could have stopped this at any time. They could have stopped the rumors, or at the very least, not believed them. Yet, like during the Sister Fight Protocol, they chose to do nothing. It's almost like they're only there for decoration.

Speaking of which, Leni asks Lincoln why he doesn't want to spend the with them. It's not like they make it seem like they're worth spending time with at all. With the Sister Fight Prptocol. they kick Lincoln out of his room three times without his permission and take his belongings without asking first. I wouldn't want to spend time with anyone who treats me like that.

Also, the joke about Rita not selling Lincoln's furniture was just cruel and sadistic. Why the hell would you joke about something like that? Oh, and maybe you didn't realize this, but locking out a minor like Lincoln is a major felony. Even if it was just once. the family should still be sent to jail and the girls sent to foster care never to see each other ever again.

The Louds are a big family,. and in families like these, everyone needs their personal space from time to time. Even if it's only once, Lincoln deserved a moment to himself. Just to recharge.

But this part goes out to you, M . You are a terrible writer and a terrible person. The fact that you wrote this FanFiction shows what a despicable person you are. I honestly hope that you die in the most horrible grotesque way possible, you sick, ugly, intolerant, victim blaming, manipulating, motherfucking, son of a bitch.

you should send this to nick with a petition to make this story into a short

I enjoyed this it pointed out the flaws of the episode and reminded us that the louds may screw up on occasion(in this case in a major way)but in the end they are a family no matter what

I hated this. Lincoln is not to blame for what happened to him. The family was the one that took it way too far.

This was well-written, it's nice that Rita was just having a joke when she claimed to have sold Lincoln's furniture. They dealt with the situation nicely, and it was good seeing how much the family cared for him. The one thing I will point out is that I don't think they necessarily had to take Lincoln straight home. First Aid for Heat Stroke say's that the first thing you do is submerge the victim in water while keeping their head up (so they can continue to breathe). Considering they were already at the lake, they could've just done that, saving Lynn Sr. the speeding tickets

I agree, there are a lot of these- I myself am guilty of publishing one too. I also agree that you did a good job with this!

Nice fanfic dude

I like how you managed to bring up a lot of the fans complaints while also keeping the story grounded in the Loud House cartoon universe.