Hey where is the next chapter i don’t see it?

I hope Yu goes to Momentos with the group

Don't get me wrong the story started out good. Your character has an amazing description (from how i imagine it) and her persona and her fighting style sound really cool.

What bothered me was that she was so snooty like when she said "of course i would be the only one landing on my feet" or "of course everyone knows my name since I'm a Kaida". Haru is rich too but she doesn't talk like that. Then she constantly followed Akira wherever he went but strangely enough found it creepy when Makoto was following Akira to keep an eye on him which she doesn't even do voluntarily. Also where does her extreme hate for Kamoshida come from? I mean yeah I hated him too while i played the game but the only reasonable emotion for her could be disgust.

You know who has a reason to hate him that much? Right Ann, Ryuji and the volleyball team. Why? Hm let's see Ann is seen by her schoolmates as "Kamoshida's bitch" even though she only does it for Shiho. Ryuji don't even get me started here. He insulted his mother who raised him all on her own and deserves the most respect for it AND broke his leg and called it "self defense". And the volleyball team gets beaten each and every day just because something doesn't go well for him.

Then the thing with Madarame she i quote "loathes" him. Again why? And Again yes what Madarame did was horrible, cruel and selfish. But why exactly does she "loathe" him? The one who should is Yusuke. Why? Because the man who raised him the man who was his "father" for as long as he can remember is responsible for his mother's death who loved her child so much she thought of him when she painted the "Sayuri".

I also agree with the Guest who wrote the long review that the authors notes in the middle of the story were unnecessary and should've been expressed through Kiku instead.

All in all i liked the story but I grew to dislike it more and more just like Kiku. This is only my personal opinion and I'm not criticizing anyone who likes the story i just didn't.

I knew it, and I can't wait to see what happens next.

I'm guessing either Haru, Yu, or Minato.

Awesome story. I really like this story. Keep up good work. Can not wait for the next chapter.

You kinda glossed over some important stuff.

Please, update soon! Your story is amazing!

She is so cool!

I like it!

Is her cousin yu narukami, the persona 4 protagonist? There were some hints last chapter, like the silver hair, him being like Akira, and not revealing his identity.

Kiku cousin is also a Persona user isn't he?

After binge-reading up to the most recent chapter, I have a few suggestions that I hope you take into consideration progressing forward.

There are spelling and grammar issues in your chapters. This can be easily fixed with spell check or having someone proofread it.

Your original character is very intriguing (and her persona is awesome!), but your pacing could use some work. While your story follows the canon timeline, you glaze over the important plot points within a paragraph or two (Shiho jumping, Kamoshida's confession). Your readers are here to read how your character, Kiku, effects the story. If you don't include her reactions to such events (or even what she does in the Palace parts), it reads like a Persona 5 walkthrough.

An example of this would be the exam days. It's copy-pasted from the game and while the answers are fun little trivia, it doesn't add to the story. However, if you want to add exam questions in future chapters, you should somehow incorporate it into the narrative, like Kiku remembering the lecture from class, reading it somewhere, etc.

My other issue are your multiple author's notes in the middle of your work. It ruins the immersion of the reader. You don't have to apologize or justify why you wrote something the way you did, this is YOUR story. That being said, your personal opinions on certain things are fine and dandy, but it should be expressed through Kiku since this is her narrative. If you want to have an opinion on something within the story, place it before or after the chapter. You also have some details that don't need to be an author's note.

Example: "Joker put a hand on my shoulder calming me down a little(Demon would be standing between Joker and Skull if she were in the game)."

Demon/Kiku herself can mention that she is standing between the two boys. That would eliminate the need for parentheses.

Please don't think I'm bashing your story, because I'm not. I really like what you have written so far and I look forward to seeing Kiku interacting with the rest of the Phantom Thieves!

This story awesome. You few up from the game and u add some scenes. I can not wait for the next chapters.