I have been following your YouTube channel for the past few weeks and have been binging your videos. You make solid video essays, so good job there.

However, I feel that you are new to writing, especially team-up stories.

Your dialog is very clunky and stilted, and the characters are inconsistent and unrealized.

You brought in Carter Grayson to lead a team, and he is just there. Has he completely ignored his Lightspeed team? Is he not the Lightspeed Rescue Ranger anymore? What happens to his relationship to Dana? How long is he going to be in the service of a 'Queen'? Is he beholden to her in someway? I'm having a bit of trouble trying to wrap my head around the fact that an American from the 21st century would willingly support a universal monarchy. That is the very antithesis of an American, who fought against monarchy for freedom. This Carter Grayson is just along for the ride.

That brings me to Ethan. Is he the token black guy/nerd for this story? If so, you are doing his character a grave injustice. Literally any nerdy character from Ranger-verse could have played his character in this story.

Kendrix is the team mom. I know you love this character from your videos. Kendrix here barely has anything to do other than offer support to the main character Jason. Wouldn't Karrone have worked better as the Pink Ranger here? She was Astronema, a galaxy conquering tyrant at one point. Wouldn't her vast knowledge have worked more effectively against Axis, another galaxy conquering tyrant? You made Kendrix a damsel in distress. She gets beat to motivate another character.

What is Taylor's contribution to the story at all? What did she contribute to the team. She blows hot and cold at Jason, and gives him one martial arts lesson. Her only moment to shine was when she went to pick up the RPM Rangers. She's a glorified bus driver.

That finally brings us to Diane and Jason Cahill. Just what are your plans regarding this twosome? When I said your characters were inconsistent and unrealized this is what I'm talking about. The Queen acts very contrarily. Zords are violent and ungraceful but she'll gladly use (what amounts to) a Death Star laser on her opponents. Rebels are always the underdogs. No one wants to support a monarchy, especially a Universal one. These Rangers are nothing more than muscle to safeguard her throne. Queen Diane is not a good character. I'm sorry.

I honestly don't know where to start with Jason. Of all the characters in this story he gets the most focus but the least consistent development, and that makes him come off worse because he gets the most focus. Usually a character of this trope will start off eager, inexperienced and idealistic. During the course of the show the character gains experience and the world loses some of the sheen. They start standing up more for themselves and will push back against others whom they might have idealized in the past. They fully accept the mantle of hero and the responsibility that comes with it. Poor Jason hasn't had any of that. Maybe you will do more with the character in future stories.

I get the feeling that you are unfamiliar with the United State military so some artistic license is acceptable. However you may find the following to be useful when you write future stories.

Senior officers will never Sir or Ma'am a junior officer and never the enlisted. It is always the other way around. This happens for cross service also. A junior officer from one branch of the military will still Sir and Ma'am a Senior officer from other branches.
Airmen are enlisted personnel. They do not get to fly in the United States Air force. They do maintenance work.
Lieutenants are mostly trainee personnel. Captains and above get to fly.
Junior officers and enlisted personnel will salute a senior officer and they will hold the salute till the senior officer responds.
A 'Captain' rank in the Navy corresponds to a 'Full Colonel' in the other branches of the military.

This is really good. You know Disney Brain, I owe you a lot. I never knew there was a fanfiction website until you mentioned it in one of your videos. It's because of you I made my own Power Rangers FanFic, and I hope you could read it, it'd mean so much to me.

It is a good story, but... why not also recuit Scott as a Altillery Ranger?

A good start for a story - I'm certainly interested in reading more. The character of Jason is an interesting one, and I like that despite being the protagonist he isn't the red ranger. It gives some interesting opportunities for development.
There are three small things I think could be added though to improve this a little, if you don't mind me saying. First, it would be nice to have a description of the suits and morphing sequence - I get that it may disrupt the flow, but the show does it all the time. Second, I feel there should be at least a small explanation as to why the RPM rangers are all together, since they all went their separate ways at the end of their story. Finally, the academy blowing up... "just then" takes away a lot of the weight it could have. Perhaps if the Queen's communication with Carter was suddenly cut off, and then they felt the tremors from the explosion?
However, these are just my opinion, and I am excited to see how this story goes.

Just binged the story, I have to say that it's a very interesting team up with these particular characters. I'm looking forward to what the future brings with them but of course I have some critiques. First off the lack of description makes the action and events go by way too fast, ending up in situations where I didn't fully realize the threat until after it passed or just end up confused overall. as a result I haven't really gotten a clue for what Axis even looks like which negatively effects his intimidation factor. Which plays into my next point, the dialogue, it was a bit stilted at times which isn't unusual for Power Rangers but it felt forced with the characters given speeches about being Rangers that just come out of nowhere honestly. If you had shown them having encounters and conversations that possibly had them forced on something other than Ranger duty or just them joking around while they're not in combat I feel like it'd give us a quicker grip on the characters' personalities. Speaking of characters however I'm gonna focus on your two new creations for now, Jason and Axis. Now with Jason I'm honestly torn, I see great potential for a character like him, growing up wanting to be a Power Ranger only to realize that they're people first and spandex wearing heroes second (Sounds familiar) but it feels like his progression goes way too quickly, he's no means a Joe Smith like Troy with his connection to what I'm assuming is the Morphing Grid itself but his character seems to shift very quickly. Also his relationship with Kendrix felt very forced with them almost randomly falling for each other save for one moment where it was hinted very heavily. I just felt like if you gave him more time then he can become a truly great character as well as Ranger. With Axis I feel like he suffers the same issue as Jason to a degree, we don't really get to fear him, over the course of the story he didn't really feel like a main bad guy but rather someone that just took control for once episode. Maybe if you showed exactly how much he enjoyed doing such terrible things such as the killing of Carter's previous squad. Ultimately what I'm trying to hammer down at this post is giving things time, allow the characters to let it fully sink in what the true stakes are in this situation, and add lots of detail, project what image is in your head into ours, but otherwise this story has great possibilities that can be used towards the future. I look forward to seeing more!

... Took a little while, but you finally got there. Good job. That is all. Much love. Keep up the good work.

Ooh. A Legendary war of your own. Hehe. Nice!

Sooo... like troy was supposed to be some sort of 'Chosen one,' now it's this OC Jason who takes the role, and has a bit of a personality? I'm just asking. It's an interesting prospect considering he's not a red ranger. Or is he? Hm... Possibly take over for carter in the future?

I am not really sure what to think of this right now. Kendrix has been killed off once before. So she might be made of sterner stuff. I just... I don't know.

Triforia... Triforia... well, trey was the guardian of the gold ranger powers for thousands of years, so maybe it's him who saved them. And the Zeo powers grow with time, soo... Hm... I wonder...

Best part of this chapter was surprisingly the dialogue between Queen Diane and the general. They spoke of ideological differences, oppression, and what it truly means to be free. while I think it took us away from the the rangers for a bit, it was also nice to see the Queen show pain at the loss of her rangers. Well done. Very well done.

Like me, you like to tell rather than show, like with the fight with Villamax. While it can work in some instances, it's usually better to write a scene out. Not a bad story so far, but I can tell you are relatively new to writing, or writing for the ranger fandom. And while you know your stuff, it's feeling a touch closer to Hyperforce than a truly new experience. For example; I would have had the rangers appear after their next team's series ended. Meaning not so close to their own end. Say... Have Carter go see Leo on Miranoi and say, 'Hey bud, need your help to save Earth again.' and Leo, in this case Kendrix is like, um... okay, sure after getting Leo's confirmation that Carter had his back during Forever red, and or the 2 part crossover in Lightspeed.

Plus having the ranger appear after their own series again distances itself from what Hyperforce is currently doing. Not saying Hyperforce is bad. I actually really like it, but just thought I would throw that out there.

Summer joining so easily after finally getting to be with Dillon felt a little like an insult to all the work put into getting them together. But that's just my opinion.

Despite all of these snips/gripes... I do feel the story has a lot of untapped potential that I hope to see the further into the story I delve.

The not great: Interesting theory, although I don't see earth falling under the leadership of a monarchy. It feels a little Sailor Moon-ish in that way.

The story feels really rushed so far. Not bad per se', but very, very rushed. Maybe slow down a touch. It will give the story a touch more gravitas, but not lose the heart of Power Rangers.

Lastly, my personal, yet silly gripe is the use of a morph with 'form' as part of it makes me crave rangers calling out, 'Ready?', and the others reply with 'Ready!'

I don't do longer reviews like this often, but you have given us so many great reviews on youtube, I felt you deserved at least the same courtesy.

The episode really stands by its name- Rescues.
Lots of hustle to save Queen and even the teammates is what interesting to see...
Even we have the first Green and Villain fight with Green morphed up. However, its short lived. (Disappointed me a little but given what the situation is, it fits well.)
I can feel the conflicts, determination and concern...all together and thats great.
The queen final escape was also a kinda surprise. I liked the twist.

But, I felt there should be something else. And, I think the dialogues must be less and the description about the situation, objects, moments (that we usually dont notice lfor egusing the phrases like
'Yellow clasped her mouth in disbelief after the ship disappeared in infinite space. Blue strikes the keys one more time in hope that they could chase after but realisation falls upon him soon that their efforts are worthless')
should be more. It will definetely impact the readers more as it will make them notice little details that can actually evoke the emotions like tension, happiness, relief, surprise... etc.
Its was just a suggestion. I dont expect you to be the great writer but still.. just to improve a bit.

(Sorry for my English too... pleasw bear with it)

Rest was good and flawlessly executed as it had really kept me engaged till now.

An immature decision taken under the influence of the emotion is what that surrounds the incidents of this episode. This is nice.
We also see the first face to face fight between the good and the evil however its short lived. (Its disheartening, yet given what the situation is, it makes sense..)
The whole effort that this villain put to keep the Queen and the rangers captive goes in vain, which delights me the most as the destruction of his plan took place in an unexpected and pleasant manner.
Just the thing now I felt is, there are more dialogues than the sentences that describe the situation and the feelings than that people are going through.
Making dialogues less and more expressive and exact to the situation and describing situations like places, movements, objects would have a greater impact upon the reader, making them engaged and hooked up.
(Just a suggestion, bear with my english please.)