I was trying to decided what piece to review. I had wanted to write something for your birthday, but I didn't have time. I am so sorry. I decided to leave you a review instead. I am glad I chose this piece. I am quite fond of Cho, and I LOVE stories that delve a bit deeper into her character. Your imagery in this was beautiful. I loved everything about it. I like how it was having something to stand for that made her feel whole again. It shows what a strong character she truly is. I liked the symbolism of the night, stars, and pink throughout the story. It gave the story a very poetic feel to it.
An absolutely beautiful piece. I will have to read more of your stories soon.
& Happy Birthday.
-Danie.

I am the rare person that adores Cho Chang, so I get super excited when I see her written well. And oh my goodness, you wrote her so perfectly.

I love that you had some focus on her grief and pain without making her seem like this weak, pathetic creature that fanfiction often portrays her as. You gave her sorrow, but you didn't let it define her. I also like that you mentioned her dating around and the maturity you gave her when she realized she wasn't looking for someone to hold her, but something to hold in her heart. Honestly, I felt so empowered by Cho here, and it was such a glorious feeling. I love that you gave her strength, that you showed her finding something to help her carry on. I loved the comparisons of the color in Cedric’s cheek to what she felt in her heart upon finding her sense of purpose.

Your word choices were absolutely gorgeous. I loved the imagery you used and how they painted such a clear picture. The repetition of night, star, sun, etc was nicely done and really cemented the theme of this story. As I read it, all I could think of was the old saying, “It's darkest before the dawn.” I'm not sure if that was intentional, or if it was a coincidence, but it definitely worked here.

You writing is so poetic, and it flows so smoothly. It's easy to get lost in the things you write, and I have to say that I am blown away by your talent. Making prose feel like poetry is not an easy task, but you manage it well.

Beautiful job.

This is absolutely amazing, although it was a little too heavy on metaphor...

Ahhh Cho, so young to have had such heart ache. And to have been such a bit player. I always felt she deserved more attention. She and Collin both. That poor boy only got three lines at his death... my only critique is this:

She had had a star once vrs She had a star once the double had is not necessary. I know it seems like it is, but trust me, proof readers will ride you hard for it once a manuscript gets submitted to an editor.

Over all great little one shot!

Grade: Outstanding
Feedback: may I start by saying how amazingly beautiful your story is? It captivated me from first words and I was lost in it all time. I really loved it and this is something unusual for me, because I usually I feel mostly uncomfortable reading about Cho and Cedric. But your story.. nope. Only raw emotion.
The flow was good and I didn't see any spag mistakes.
Submission points: 10
Judge points: 10!
Bonus points, five for each secondary prompt: 10
Total: 30

Dude that was awesome! Also btw, I totally love that song, war of hearts by RuelleI have absolutely no criticism for you. Oneshots are supposed to be like this and you delivered. Great job