Good start, an intetesting plot. But you need an editor. I found many grammatic errors including syntaxic errors as well. Let me or any Beta on this site know if you'd like help. It won't take much!
And by all means, please do pick this up and keep going. Great start!

Hello Crazy Pedantic

Loving it please continue soon

nice seeing Zabini

Intriguing start if a lttle scrappy grammatically. "Modal Slytherin" is not quite what you meant, I assume. Nor is it the only example. The Black Family are always a good basis for excellent stories and a powerful, intelligent Harry is equally good.

blegh

SHITFIC

you cannot even pronounce the name of the phoenix correctly.