Beautiful! Keep writing! You could make a whole series on little Depa. She is such a loveable character.

You got quite a concept here, don't stop now, run with it! :)

Let us grow up with her, feel her pain and her happiness. Kallus, being a close friend and ally, and with her incredible parents, AWESOME. You got to put Uncle Ezra and Aunt Sabine in there eventually. You could even do a whole chapter on the return of Zeb... awesome concept. And don't forget about Chopper! I want to know what happens. :)

My only advice is: Don't stop writing! :)

That was so touching. First off, I love that you made reference to Kanan being alive; his death in the series was a heart-breaker. Second off, you having her call Kallus 'Xander' is SO CUTE. Beautiful little story, keep writing! I can't wait to see how this problem that has been identified is going to be handled.

Bullying is a serious problem. Being told things like that as a child is very hurtful. I am glad she stood up for herself, and her parents, though. I hope she learns to use her mouth and vocabulary instead of her fist next time so she doesn't get hurt, but on the other hand it serves that guy right to get a mark from a little kid!

You have a lovely writing style and I really like this Kallus/Depa uncle and mentoring role that he has in her life. Do you think you could write an entire fan fic about the two and how he helps her through out her life? You portray what Kanan and Hera's kid would act like very well, you should be proud and take pride in your work.

so sweet, more please

FORESHADOWING

I LOVE this! Your characterization is spot on for me, and I can never turn down a store with a Kanera baby in it.

Agh. I thought I loved this before but this chapter made it even better- I didn’t think we’d get a second one! I seriously almost cried- the emotions that you wrote Hera with here were so powerful! I could see it all playing out, her fear, Kanan’s comfort... every moment was beautiful from start to finish! J’adore!

Typing on my phone so this will be shorter than I wanted. It’s not messy because of you...prejudice IS by its nature a messy, painful thing. Hera’s feelings were right on. They made me feel for her soooo much. And Kanan was perfect too. I am not a mom but I liked the way she felt she had more of a bond with Depa, but then that made me feel bad for Kanan (as in where does that leave him?). I would love to see Depa and Kanan together...maybe talking about Hera’s feelings? I don’t know...it’s just great like it is too! You rock. Now I’m off to work. I loved it!

I thought it was very good. The only thing I'd like to see is maybe that bedtime scene between Kanan and Depa. I think it would be cool to see their relationship now that she's older. Other than that, it felt really well developed. I though you wrote Hera very accurately. Great job! Keep writing!

Hera's anger was to be expected. Yet for me what was great was the way, through Hera's feelings of hurt and Kanan's response, we get glimpses of how this child came to be and what it meant to her parents. Totally sweet.

I thought you did it perfectly. Very nicely done again!

Great job! You portrayed Hera very realistically and kept her true to her character.

WHERE ARE EZRA AND SABINE! GIVE ME UNCLE EZRA AND AUNT SABINE!

Please write a second part to this, I am dying to see how Kanan and Hera handle this.

This is blooming great :)