Cool concept. Plz continue

I am sad about Edmund

Good story yes i agree the pace is a little fast you could slow it down a little bit . I like that they all found each other .

nice concept... but i think the pace is too fast for a story that just in its opening stages... i think you should slow down the pace a bit ang increase the pace slowly as it approach its climax... you're writing shows potential so i look forward to your story

"And the plot thickens", as they say - don't ask me who "they" are, I'm still not sure.

Well, I simply loved this concept and story - absolutely brilliant! I hope you continue the story as I have a stupid grim on my lips right now and am quickening in my blankets (partly because of my excitement for this story, but also because it's bloody freezing in my room).

I can tell you right now, that you have a faithful follower and reader in this story. I look forward to the next chapter and wish you luck in the New Year.

from Lily.

Happy birthday! This looks interesting :-)