Please say you have an epilogue somewhere?

"Sure I do! You're beautiful and smart and funny and I feel lucky you persuaded me to be your date..." she frowned and he corrected immediately, "... I feel lucky I managed to convince you to be my date." She smiled in reward. "I know you can also be fierce, demanding and intimidating and I appreciate the way you used these qualities to make me a better date."

Her smile broadened. "You really are sweet when you try a bit."

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Daphne definitely asked Harry to take her to the ball. Harry did not do ANY persuading at all, in fact it was Daphne who persuaded him by offering to teach him to dance. So unless I misread, Daphne either has amnesia or a very fragile ego.

Also, this sentence by Harry sounds like a rehearsed script and very unlike the rest of his speech. He was responding to her question so it's not like he had prepared this statement in his head beforehand.

And finally, "You really are sweet when you try a bit." Really? This has such a condescending tone because there's no implication that she was joking or teasing him. She was flat out praising him for "correcting himself" when that correction is actually a lie to protect her ego.

Sorry but I don't like this Daphne at all.

Love it

Once again you fail to ttripping the light fantastic ThankYou

I know it’s ridiculous on my part, but I don’t like how you had them manage corporeal patroni within the day. It took Harry more than that, he’s significantly more powerful than them and Lupin was still very surprised because most adults never manage to make corporeal patronihell, even Cygnus said he struggles. Yet Daphne manages it in hours and Astoria, even younger than when Harry first managed it did so in less than a day as well.

I didn’t like that in canon either. The patronus was propped up to be an amazingly difficult spell and was the single best piece of magic Harry used in the entire bloody series, proving his power and skill. Yet in fifth year he casually teaches pretty much every student in the DA, including second and third years.

That was a pleasant enough story, for what it was.

really nice for once adults did something correctly

Loved the story

Nice and economical.

Thanks for sharing

Sneaky; I like it

Good job. Seemed fast on engagement with Hermione. But I look at it from Muggle perspective

Nice twists to Canon and your plot line.

Loved character interactions (though missing Luna; don’t worry for I lobby every author ;))

Nice plot point about additional safeguards.

Imagining fallout will be bad over betrothal.

Good. I like your Daphne.

I can see just friendship with Hermione but not if it means Moron.

Good. I like all your characterizations.

Harry bright but Canon treated him like a mushroom