good job

Wow. Beautiful story. I was going to cry if she got hit. This story gave me thrills. I love it.

GOT DAMN LEOCHICKX! omg i literally could not stop reading! This iwas very good. u had a couple of mispelled words and sentence fragments but that didn't even matter! i was too hooked to notice! OMG yes, this has been added to my community, it deserves to be!

OH MY GOODNESS THIS IS GOOD! u rock! lol the drama was really done well...just everything was...man imma shut up now and bask in the awesomeness of this story so far! lol

well, I must say that I am VERY impressed with this story so far! I know it's just the first chapter, but I am hooked. I loved how you kept the whole argument thing between Terry and Dana pretty much the same, and I love how you kept everyone in character! I have two Terry/Max stories of my own right now, and I'm also the admin to a community dedicated to Max called: Heart of an Amazon. I hope you don't mind if I add this to my community?Oh, and I hope you don't mind if I borrow a line from this chapter: "Be somewhere, now" _ that was too cute! i cant wait to read more. for your first story, this is doing very good so far!

plz let there be an epilogue

Jezus! That is one lousy place to stop. Write more! I loved this story, I need more!

I'm a big fan of the Terry/Max genre, so I liked it very much.

But you maybe want to check your spelling a bit.

Love Jade

Straight up Chick, I had to add your story to my favorites list, cause I had a blast reading it:) Trevor and Todd really had me on the edge of my seat. I would get half way through a chapter and be afraid to read what was going to hapen next, cause that Trevor kid freaked me out so much. Even though the two brothers didn't read like they lacked in the looks department, there is just something not right about stalkers/rapist- wanabees.

Were you just being modest when you said you didn't know how to write action scenes? Cause, if not...you're a damn lie! OMG! Those last two chapters were filled with action and suspense. Fix falling through the roof of the limo was written perfectly! And that subway scene was primo. I kept thinking how much I would hate being hit by a train, but for some reason I didn't expect Trevor to actually die. When it happened I was like, *SNAP*, oh well.

How could I not comment on Terry and Max. They were beautiful. I was so relieved when Terry was there for Max while she detoxed. Oh! I just remembered in like the second chapter when Todd was harassing Max and Ter came up all "be somewhere now" (I'm going to incorporate that expression whenever I can). Then when those cheerleaders were hittin' on Ter, Max told them to "be gone." *LMAO* They weren't even a couple yet, but sure were very territorial of each other. I so didn't expect them to sleep together when they did, nor did I envision Max being the one to take that first step. The situation read so real it seemed private, so I wasn't even upset that there were no major details (big perv, I know). Well this has gotten kinda long and i think you get the point...I was very pleased;)

out of curiosity I started looking around for Max/Terry fics and so far this is the only one I've found that is even remotely completed.
I've quite enjoyed it, though I do wish you'ld finished it/written more. Either I'm looking in the wrong place or Batman Beyond didn't have enough following to produce the fanfiction some of the other shows I've gotten interested in have.

That fic was awesome! You had a few spelling errors but other than that I couldn't find anything wrong with it. You are a really talented author, and all I can say is go Girl! Oh yeah and update The Apple from the Tree.

Is this the last chappie? If it is I still hope you get this review, your story was awesome, thank you for writing it.

I liked this chapter very much! Despite your spelling errors you really have a good story here. I think you did a very good job portraying the twins. Twins usually rock as a rule and I speak without bias as I'm one myself – Lol! :) And as such I loved the evil twin bit a few chapters ago. Thinking about that now after reading this chapter is quite funny since you've shown us what makes Trevor tick.
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You really made me feel Trevor's emotions and see into his head. It was a little creepy and yet very nicely done. Very believable. And the things Trevor knew about the other girl like her favorite color etc. aptly showed his obsessive nature. I also liked how you had him noticing things about Max and Terry. How he knew Terry was always around, touching Max's hands, and making her laugh so he could see her smile - oh my, very, very nice.
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Oh, and let me add that I loved it when Terry noticed when Todd was there but his shadow/twin, Trevor, wasn't. Good work an excellent chapter! Nicely done.

Still reading. Very intriguing!

I would have to agree that you do need a beta but spelling mistakes aside I really like this story. I'm a huge Max/Terry fan and you don't see too many of them. Now can you tell me what Batman's mack means?

I loved it, it was great. LOL now there are going to be rumors about Batman and her LOL, Anyway, Bye-bye:p