very interesting story although I don't see how in short time the Cullens reached Volterra Bella was changed and in control of her powers

That was very entertaining. Thanks for sharing

Great story. Thanks.

great story, thanks!

Quite entertaining, especially the last paragraph! :-)) Thanks for sharing. Very different and imaginative.

This was a fantastic read well done

I love this story

Very creative. It was difficult to know who was saying what.

I tried so hard to enjoy the story but I just got lost towards the end. I love the concept but the writing itself did little justice to the plot idea. However, I do like your writing style and the characters but I think your character development needs a bit of work. My advice to you is to pace your writing and maybe try doing a multi chapter fic instead of a one shot. That way, you'll be able to convey your ideas more effectively.
Great story either way

I love this, I love Bella and Demetri together and I love Bella's power and I especially love that you made Bella and Demetri Badass and I like it when Jasper is good, thank you for writing such a Badass story

I'm not sure how I missed the fact that you wrote a Demetri/Bella story. The idea of Bella's power is really unique. I love the bad ass traits of both Demetri and Bella and would so love to read more of this or another Demetri/Bella fic. And M rated one with lots of smut and bassery would be great!

Enjoyed, which there was more. Thank you for sharing your words. Meg

I love prank on Peter!
Hilarious!
I wish this was fleshed out more, but it is pretty succinct.

Loved it.

The chapter is great! Amazing! Simply amazing! I love your writing and i love this story!