Work on your sentence structure. I always appreciate a nice complex sentence that is fun to digest but some of these need to be be broken up. Try it with the second sentence in this. Other than that I really enjoy this creativity (:

This was pretty good, you've obviously studied the show. I wish while he was musing away Revy would have barged in and called him an idiot! Ha! Nice story

I enjoyed this. It was kind of a nice recap of what happened in the show but with a few added in details so it could be a story.

Interesting