| Reviews for The Second Try |
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Guest chapter 14 . 8/29 You should update this amazing story |
Book-Girl chapter 14 . 8/18 I hate you. I hate you for not updating this for more than a year. I love you. I love you cause you came up with this genius story, all of their characteristics PERFECTLY intact! And that they are all friends and they get along! Also because they are all awesome in they're own awesome way! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE YOUR STORY! I wont have any chance of living if you dont finish this! Thank you 4 reading this! |
AthenaRavenclaw-Slytherin chapter 12 . 7/8 Artemis? Goddess of the moon? You mean, Selene/Seline... Artemis is the goddess of wild animals, the hunt, and vegetation and of chastity and childbirth, not moon. |
Laurkowata chapter 14 . 6/11/2019 Hi! Just wanted to say, I love this story. I especially like that it's so lighthearted and humorous instead of sad or angsty. While it may seem a little too easy, that everyone just got a second chance, I really like that they decided to let go of old grudges and focused on the better future and friendship instead. It's just one of those stories that make you smile. I'm also really excited about Lilly and Sev becoming animagi. I think Snape would be a bat, while Lilly might be a doe, or a lioness, or perhaps a fox. I cannot wait to know! So far, my favourite chapter was the one with Dumbledore. It's nice you decided not to show him as manipulative puppetmaster, but a man that regrets his mistakes. I also like Snape being so terrified of seeing the man he killed and how Dumbledore handles the conversation. Also the support from Lilly and the way the Marauders try to comfort Peter is really heartwarming. Anyway, I hope you're doing all right and I cannot wait for more! Laura |
Guest chapter 14 . 5/17/2019 Please update soon; so good |
Mamamama99 chapter 3 . 4/17/2019 Okay umm...I don't really know how to say this. The idea behind this is actually so good and makes such sense that it's a wonder I haven't seen it before. It's just...You really should have gotten a beta reader or something. The punctuation's all over the place, the grammar is weird...I'm not criticizing just for the sake of it though. You could improve and go from this, aka a good plan with lacking execution, to writing one excellent HP fanfic that people would talk about and recommend to their friends. At least I see that kind of potential. Yeah, that may sound patronizing of me but it still hurts a bit to see a great idea being paired with subpar writing. Anyways, see you after chapter 13. |
Grammarosprey chapter 14 . 3/31/2019 This is so good! Lovely transformation scene. Post again soon or I will set tiny Grim on you ;) |
Max Smith chapter 14 . 3/27/2019 I just found this fic and I absolutely love it, and congratulations! |
biancaruth chapter 14 . 3/17/2019 It was a lovely chapter please don’t take offence by two small pieces of criticism. 1. You describe the stag as having horns but earlier you state even as a 5th year the stag’s horns weren’t fully formed as their animagis forms age with them. Likewise the other 2 should be a medium sized puppy and a young rat (whatever they are called). 2. The animals drank from the stream but you stated in this very chapter that the room couldn’t provide food or DRINK. |
nadasnape chapter 14 . 3/12/2019 Congrats on getting married! Also, nice chapter I missed these guys. |
ragsweas chapter 14 . 3/12/2019 Oh my god, this story is amazing! I absolutely love it! Congratulations on the wedding! Update soon, I really want to know what happens next! |
dianaanne chapter 14 . 3/12/2019 Interesting story! |
elmbell chapter 13 . 2/18/2019 Have re-read this story and still enjoy it so much. Hoping that you will come back to it |
Guest chapter 13 . 2/13/2019 Please update soon, it’s a very good story and I would love to see how they use their second chances |
Guest chapter 13 . 11/13/2018 Pease update as soon as you can; very unique and interesting |